Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변은 직접적이고 자연스럽지만 더 구체적인 세부정보와 연결어를 사용하여 풍부하게 만들 필요가 있습니다. 예를 들어 자전거를 어떻게 사용했는지(통학, 놀이 등), 누가 줬는지, 또는 그 자전거와 관련된 기억을 한두 문장으로 추가하면 답변이 더 설득력 있습니다. 또한 문장 수를 3문장 내외로 유지하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was twelve, which my parents bought for me as a birthday present. I used it mainly to ride around the neighborhood with my friends, and I remember practicing until I could ride without training wheels.

提案: 의견을 제시한 것은 좋지만 문장이 어색하고 불완전합니다. 첫 문장에서 명확한 주제문을 제시하고 이어서 이유와 구체적 예를 한두 가지로 뒷받침하세요. 연결어(For example, because, so)를 사용하여 문장들 사이의 논리적 흐름을 개선하고, 마지막의 'On day.'와 같은 불필요하거나 의미 불명확한 구절은 제거하세요.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in Korea because many cities have dedicated bike lanes and people use bikes for short commutes. For example, I often see commuters riding to subway stations, and families cycling in parks on weekends.

× Many people ride a bicycle.

✓ Many people ride bicycles.

The original sentence uses 'a bicycle' which implies one specific bicycle; when speaking generally about what people do, use the plural noun 'bicycles' or the uncountable/zero-article form 'ride bicycle' (which is not idiomatic). Use plural to express a general habit: 'Many people ride bicycles.' Replace singular countable with plural for general statements (Singular and plural issue, ID 1).

× On day.

✓ One day.

'On day' is a fragment and missing the determiner 'one' or an article. To refer to a single unspecified day in the past, use 'One day.' The error is that the word 'On' requires a noun phrase like 'one day' or a specific day (e.g., 'on Monday'). Correct to 'One day.' (Sentence structure error, ID 26).