Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct past tense and subject-verb agreement, and avoid overly long or awkward phrasing. Add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word (for example or because) to make the answer natural and coherent.

例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child because I enjoyed sports and outdoor activities. For example, there was a small courtyard downstairs where I practised riding every afternoon, so I became quite confident on two wheels.

提案: Make your answer relevant, coherent and concise. Begin with a direct response (Yes/No and a brief explanation), avoid filler words (uh, um), and give specific reasons or examples for popularity (e.g. commuting, leisure, delivery). Use linking words (because, for example) and finish the sentence fully.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, mainly for short commutes and deliveries. For example, many people use bicycles to travel to nearby shops or for food delivery because they are cheap and easy to park.

× Yes I did. I had a bike when I were a child because I like sports and downstairs of my home I have the place to play the bicycle, so I enjoyed it.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child because I liked sports and there was a place downstairs in my home to ride a bicycle, so I enjoyed it.

Multiple tense-related errors: 'were' should be past tense singular 'was' (subject 'I') — Past tense issue. 'I like' should match past narrative 'I liked' — Past tense issue. 'I have the place to play the bicycle' is awkward and tense/lexically incorrect; changed to 'there was a place downstairs in my home to ride a bicycle' to use past tense and correct verb collocation. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent when describing past experiences and use natural collocations for activities (ride a bicycle, not play the bicycle).

× I can see uh yes, but that is, uh, based on the purpose, uh, my, in my country, uh, the bikes are popular, popular in flavored food, uh, from a food planter. So, uh, if you ask me questions, I.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, but their popularity depends on their purpose. They are common among food delivery workers and in areas with food markets. If you ask me, ...

The original is ungrammatical and disfluent: word order and connectors are incorrect — Sentence structure errors. Phrases like 'popular in flavored food' and 'from a food planter' are semantically and grammatically wrong; likely intended to refer to food delivery or food vendors. Correction provides clear sentence structure, proper clause linking, and appropriate vocabulary. Suggestion: Organize ideas with a main clause and supporting clauses, avoid filler sounds, and choose precise nouns (food delivery workers, vendors) to express meaning.