Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and understandable, but it can be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating time references and correct tense consistency (e.g., ‘went’ or ‘would go’ instead of ‘go’).

例: Yes – I had a bike when I was a child. I often cycled around my neighborhood after finishing my homework to relax and meet friends, which helped me stay active and enjoy the outdoors.

提案: Your answer communicates the main idea but is repetitive and contains filler words. Give one clear reason and a specific example or comparison, and use linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘for example’, ‘as a result’) to make your response coherent. Also avoid filler sounds like ‘uh’.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many office workers and college students use them for daily commuting. For example, during rush hour large numbers of cyclists can be seen on main roads, which reduces traffic congestion and saves money on transport.

× I remember those days when I was cycling because after doing my study I always go for cycling to spend my time.

✓ I remember those days when I was cycling because after doing my studies I always went cycling to pass the time.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'I remember' and 'I was cycling' are past, so the habitual action should be in past tense: 'I always went cycling.' Also 'study' as a habit should be pluralized to 'studies' and 'go for cycling' is unnatural; use 'went cycling' or 'went for a cycle'. Improve by making tense consistent and using natural collocations: use past tense for habitual past actions and 'studies' for regular schoolwork.

× To be honest, yes, I think bikes are more popular in my country uh, because most of the office workers and thus college students use bike uh for daily travel.

✓ To be honest, yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because most office workers and college students use bikes for daily travel.

The original has number agreement and word choice problems. 'Use bike' is incorrect; the plural noun 'bikes' is needed to match the plural subject 'most office workers and college students' (singular/plural issue). Also 'more popular' implies a comparison without a reference; 'very popular' fits the intended meaning. Remove filler 'thus' and hesitation 'uh' for clarity. Ensure noun pluralization and appropriate adjective choice.