Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable and directly answers the question, but it is repetitive and a little simplistic. Improve by giving a clearer topic sentence and adding one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words (e.g., 'bike' and 'child') unnecessarily and aim for varied vocabulary.

例: Yes, I did. I often rode a small red bicycle around my neighborhood to learn balance and gain confidence. For example, I practiced every weekend with my older cousin, which helped me ride without training wheels by the age of six.

提案: The response answers the question but has problems with repetition, grammar, and clarity. Improve by using clear linking words, correcting grammar, avoiding repeated words, and providing one specific reason or statistic. Make sentences more natural and coherent.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many streets are narrow and congested, so cycling is often faster than driving. Moreover, bicycles are inexpensive and commonly used by students and office workers for short commutes.

× Yes, I had a bike because I wanted to practice riding a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike because I wanted to practice riding when I was a child.

The phrase 'riding a bike' is redundant after stating 'I had a bike'; removing 'a bike' avoids unnecessary repetition. This is a style/conciseness suggestion; plural/singular is acceptable but concise phrasing is clearer. Suggestion: omit repeated noun when context already makes it clear.

× Yes I do because there are a lot of narrow narrow Rd. and after that so most people need to take a bike to go to the office and the school.

✓ Yes, I do because there are a lot of narrow roads, so most people need to take a bike to go to work or school.

Multiple problems corrected: 'Rd.' is an abbreviation and not appropriate here; use 'roads' (plural) because 'a lot' refers to multiple roads (singular/plural issue addressed). The repeated word 'narrow' is a duplication error. 'After that so' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'so' alone to show cause and effect. 'Go to the office and the school' is unnatural; use 'go to work or school.' Preposition 'to go to work' is correct. Suggestion: avoid abbreviations and repeated words, use plural 'roads' and a single conjunction 'so' to link cause and effect, and use natural collocations like 'go to work' or 'go to school.'