Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, use a clear topic sentence and add one specific supporting detail. Avoid tense and article errors and keep it concise (max 5 sentences). For example, use past tense for childhood, include small linking word if adding detail.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a blue bicycle when I was eight, and I used to ride it to my friends' houses every weekend.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, use smoother linking words, avoid filler sounds (uh), and provide one specific reason or example to support your view. Use accurate word order and more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'most people' not 'mostly people').

例: Not really. Most people prefer motorcycles because they are faster and more practical in traffic; however, bikes are still useful for children as they help them learn balance and prepare for riding motorcycles later.

× Yes I have, my parents bought it for me and it's color blue.

✓ Yes, I had one; my parents bought it for me and its color was blue.

The student is answering a past-tense question ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so verbs and descriptions should be in the past tense. 'Yes I have' mixes present tense with a past context — use 'Yes, I had one.' Also 'it's color blue' is incorrect: 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' (present) and also the possessive should be 'its', and the adjective 'blue' describes color; in past context use 'its color was blue.' Suggestion: match tense to the question (use past tense), use the possessive 'its' rather than 'it's' and include necessary punctuation to separate clauses.

× No, the popular, uh, vehicle that mostly people use in our country is motorcycle.

✓ No. The most popular vehicle that people in our country use is the motorcycle.

The original sentence has word order and determiner problems. 'the popular, uh, vehicle that mostly people use' is awkward: 'mostly people' should be 'people mostly' or better 'people in our country'. Use 'most popular' to compare relative popularity. English requires an article before a singular countable noun: 'the motorcycle.' Suggestion: reorder to 'The most popular vehicle that people in our country use is the motorcycle.' and remove filler words like 'uh' in finished answers.

× But uh, for the kids, it's uh, very useful for them to train how to ride a motorcycle.

✓ But for kids, it is very useful for them to learn how to ride a motorcycle.

'Train how to ride a motorcycle' is not idiomatic; native speakers say 'learn how to ride' or 'practice riding.' Also 'for the kids' can be simplified to 'for kids.' Ensure verb choice matches meaning: 'train' often requires an object (train someone) or 'train to' + verb; here 'learn how to ride' is natural. Remove filler 'uh' and keep tense consistent (present general truth), so use simple present 'is' and 'learn.'