Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical correctness, clarity and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article use, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and redundancy.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I learned to ride it in my neighborhood park. As a result, I became more confident and spent many afternoons exploring with my friends.

提案: Make the response more natural and structured: give a clear opinion, then two concise, specific reasons linked with words such as 'because' and 'however'. Correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, articles, conditionals) and reduce repetition.

例: Not really — bikes are not very popular in my city. Because traffic is heavy and many people prefer cars, cycling can be dangerous on busy roads. However, bicycles are more common in quieter towns and among people who use them for exercise.

× Yes, I had the bike when I was child and that was incredible experience for me.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and that was an incredible experience for me.

Errors: missing or incorrect articles. 'the bike' implies a specific bike; 'a bike' is more natural when introducing possession in childhood. 'when I was child' is missing the article 'a' before 'child'. 'incredible experience' needs the indefinite article 'an' because 'experience' is a singular countable noun modified by 'incredible' which begins with a vowel sound. Suggestion: use 'a bike', 'a child', and 'an incredible experience' to form grammatically correct noun phrases.

× I don't think bikes are popular in my country because I live in a big city and there's many people drive a car, so when we go out with bikes that will be dangerous for us and that's why.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because I live in a big city and there are many people who drive cars, so when we go out on bikes it is dangerous for us and that's why.

Multiple errors: 'there's many people' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'there are' with plural 'many people'. Missing relative pronoun 'who' before 'drive'. 'drive a car' is better as plural 'drive cars' when referring to many people in general. 'go out with bikes' should be 'go out on bikes' (preposition use). 'that will be dangerous for us' is awkward for general statement about danger; use 'it is dangerous for us'. Suggestion: ensure 'there are' for plural subjects, include 'who' for relative clauses, use plural nouns for generalization, correct preposition to 'on' with 'bikes', and use 'it is' for general statements about situations.