Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief specific detail using linking words. Correct pronouns and verb forms (e.g., “bought one for my elder brother”). Avoid redundancy like repeating “maybe the reason” and unnecessary fillers.

例: No, I didn’t have my own bike as a child. Later my family bought one for my elder brother, so I learned to ride using his bike and we often shared it. Because of that, I became comfortable cycling only occasionally.

提案: Provide a clear direct answer, fix repetition and pluralization, and add a specific reason or example with a linking word. Use accurate collocations (e.g., “public transport” not “public transportations”) and avoid repeating phrases.

例: Not really — in my country most people don’t ride bikes. Instead, they usually rely on public transport such as buses and trains because the cities are busy and cycling infrastructure is limited.

× Actually I didn't have my own bike when I was a child, maybe the reason that I had never wanted one.

✓ Actually I didn't have my own bike when I was a child; maybe the reason was that I never wanted one.

Error: incorrect clause structure and tense consistency. The original uses 'maybe the reason that I had never wanted one' which is unidiomatic and mixes past perfect unnecessarily. Suggestion: use 'maybe the reason was that I never wanted one' to provide a clear main clause ('the reason was') and a simple past ('never wanted') consistent with 'didn't have'. This makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× But later my family bought my for my elder brother and I started learning with him and we shared the same bike.

✓ But later my family bought one for my elder brother, and I started learning with him, and we shared the same bike.

Error: missing object after 'bought' and incorrect pronoun case 'my elder brother and I' used in sequence causing ambiguity. Also 'my' alone is incorrect. Suggestion: insert 'one' as the object ('bought one for my elder brother'), use commas to separate clauses, and keep 'I started learning with him' as a separate clause. Note: 'elder brother' is acceptable, but 'older brother' is more common.

× That's quite interesting questions because in my in my country, most people don't bike, don't ride bikes.

✓ That's quite an interesting question, because in my country most people don't bike or ride bikes.

Error: plural/singular mismatch and repetition 'in my in my'. 'That's quite interesting questions' is incorrect because 'that is' requires a singular noun; use 'an interesting question'. Also repetitive phrase should be cleaned. Use 'don't bike or ride bikes' to avoid repeating negation unnecessarily.

× They usually prefer public transportations when they want to go somewhere.

✓ They usually prefer public transport when they want to go somewhere.

Error: 'transportations' is incorrect; 'transport' as a noun is uncountable in this context. Use 'public transport' or 'public transportation' (uncountable). Remove plural form. This fixes noun form and makes the sentence natural.