Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and article use), keep answers concise and natural, and add one specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then briefly explain when or why you got a bike using a linking word like "but" or "however."

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I bought a nice bicycle two years ago because it’s convenient for commuting to university.

提案: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct, use linking words and specific data or examples. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with a specific reason or example and a linking word such as "because" or "for example."

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people prefer them for short trips and to avoid traffic. For example, in my city there are dedicated bike lanes and many students use bicycles to get to school.

× No, I don't have any bike when I am child, but now I'm young and I have a very beautiful bike with me.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but now I'm an adult and I have a very nice bike.

This sentence contains multiple tense and article errors. 'Don't have' is present tense but the question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so use past simple 'didn't have' (Grammar problem type ID 5: Past tense issue). 'Any bike' is incorrect here; use the singular countable noun with an article: 'a bike' (Grammar problem type ID 22: Article errors). 'When I am child' is wrong because of tense and missing article; correct to 'when I was a child' (past tense and article). 'Now I'm young' conflicts with having been a child; more natural is 'now I'm an adult' or 'now I'm older' to show contrast; this is a lexical choice but maintain present tense 'I'm'. 'Very beautiful' is acceptable but 'very nice' is more natural spoken English. Suggested improvements: match the verb tense to the time reference (use past tense for past situations), use appropriate articles with countable nouns, and choose vocabulary that fits the intended contrast (child vs adult).

× Yes, my country is one of the biggest countries in which bikes are used. The population of bike users are too much in my country than the cars.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. There are more bicycle users than car users.

The original has several problems. 'My country is one of the biggest countries in which bikes are used' is wordy and unnatural; replace with 'bicycles are very popular in my country' (Grammar problem type ID 26: Sentence structure errors). 'The population of bike users are too much' has subject-verb agreement error: 'population' is singular so should take 'is' (Grammar problem type ID 27: Subject-verb agreement errors), but 'population' and 'too much' are inappropriate collocations for people count (Grammar problem type ID 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Better is 'There are more bicycle users than car users' which uses a clear comparative structure. Also 'bikes' vs 'bicycle users' consistency: use 'bicycle users' or 'people who ride bicycles' for clarity. Suggested improvements: use natural expressions for popularity ('popular') and correct comparative structures ('more X than Y'), ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose appropriate quantifiers for people ('more', 'fewer', 'many').