Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitation sounds and correct basic grammar (use past tense consistently and correct verbs: 'ride' not 'write'). Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas. For example, say you didn’t have a bike, give a clear reason, and mention if you got one later.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I couldn’t ride it and I was still learning to balance. However, I got a bike when I was ten, and I used it to cycle to my friends’ houses every weekend.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating whether bikes are popular. Give specific supporting details (who uses them, why they are popular) and use linking words (for example, 'because', 'so', 'also'). Correct pronoun and article use (e.g., 'bikes are popular', 'I prefer to ride my bike'). Keep it to three sentences maximum and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. Many students and workers use bicycles to commute to school and work, especially in busy cities. I also prefer riding my bike for errands because it’s faster than walking and cheaper than taking a taxi.

× Honestly speaking, I do not have any bike, uh, in my childhood, uh, because that time I can't umm, write any bike even though I can't walk properly.

✓ Honestly speaking, I did not have a bike in my childhood because at that time I couldn't even ride a bike and I couldn't walk properly.

The original mixes present tense ('do not have') with past time reference ('in my childhood') and uses incorrect verbs ('can't', 'write') and modal forms. Use simple past 'did not have' and past ability 'couldn't' to match the time frame. Replace 'write' with 'ride' (correct verb). Also use 'a bike' instead of 'any bike' for a typical countable noun in a negative past statement. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for events in childhood and use correct verb 'ride'.

× So I didn't have any back in my childhood, but I do have.

✓ So I didn't have one back in my childhood, but I do now.

The sentence mixes past negative 'didn't have' with present 'do have' but ends incompletely. Use 'one' to refer to a singular bike and add 'now' to indicate present possession. Keep past simple for childhood and present simple for current state. Ensure sentence is complete.

× Yes, and white is very popular in my country and many people use bike to travel and it is very convenient to travel.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country and many people use bikes to travel because they are very convenient.

'White is very popular' is unclear and likely wrong adjective placement; probably intended 'bicycles are very popular'. Use the plural 'bicycles' or 'bikes' for a general statement. Also use a conjunction 'because' to explain reason and correct noun phrase 'use bikes to travel'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural collocation.

× I also prefer to ride your bike when I have to go on any specific place.

✓ I also prefer to ride my bike when I have to go to a specific place.

The original uses the wrong possessive pronoun 'your' instead of 'my' and incorrect preposition 'on' with 'place'. Use 'my' to refer to the student's own bike and 'go to a specific place'. Also 'any specific place' is awkward; 'a specific place' is clearer.

× So I think in my country very popular bike it's and you can.

✓ So I think bikes are very popular in my country and you can see them everywhere.

The original sentence has confused word order and incomplete clause 'it's and you can'. Reorder to subject-verb-object: 'bikes are very popular' and complete the thought by adding a clause like 'you can see them everywhere'. This fixes sentence structure and adds a complete idea.