Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Also correct tense and verb forms (e.g., “I didn’t have a bike” and “I wasn’t interested”). If you mention games, give a brief specific example and link to the reason you didn’t ride a bike.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I wasn’t interested in outdoor activities. Instead, I preferred indoor games such as Kerem Burludo and playing on my mobile phone. As a result, I never learned to ride a bicycle, even when I was older.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer reasons with accurate grammar and linking words. Begin with a topic sentence, then give specific reasons or examples (e.g., affordability, traffic, culture). Use comparative phrases correctly (e.g., “many people cannot afford cars, so they use motorcycles or bicycles”) and avoid vague or incorrect words such as “some know people.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Nepal. Because many families cannot afford cars, motorcycles and bicycles are more affordable and practical for daily transport. For example, I often see people commuting to work and students riding bikes along busy roads, especially in small towns.

× I didn't have any bike when I was a child because I was never interested in those kind of things.

✓ I didn't have any bikes when I was a child because I was never interested in those kinds of things.

The noun 'bike' should be plural after 'any' when referring to an unspecified number of items; also 'those kind' should be 'those kinds' because 'those' is plural. Suggestion: use 'any bikes' or rephrase as 'a bike' if you mean a single bike; match singular/plural consistently.

× I usually prefer to play inside like indoor games like Kerem Burludo and some kind of mobile games.

✓ I usually prefer to play inside, such as indoor games like Kerem Burludo and some mobile games.

The phrasing 'some kind of mobile games' is awkward and 'like' is repeated. 'Usually prefer' is present tense and fine, but improve parallel structure: use 'such as' and 'some mobile games.' Also remove redundant 'like' and 'kind of.' Suggestion: keep present tense and use clear examples: 'such as indoor games... and mobile games.'

× And also when I grew up I get to problem to bike, so I learning.

✓ Also, when I grew up I had trouble riding a bike, so I didn't learn.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'when I grew up' requires past reference, so use past tense 'had' for 'have trouble.' 'Get to problem to bike' is ungrammatical; use 'had trouble riding a bike.' 'so I learning' should be past negative 'so I didn't learn' or 'so I never learned.' Suggestion: use consistent past tense and correct verb phrases: 'had trouble riding a bike' and 'so I never learned.'

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because in the developing countries like Nepal, some know people can afford big vehicles like cars or any other vehicles.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because in developing countries like Nepal, some people cannot afford large vehicles like cars.

Problems: 'the developing countries' should be 'developing countries' for generalization; 'some know people' is incorrect — likely 'some people' or 'not everyone'; 'can afford' contradicts meaning. Use 'cannot afford' to explain why bikes are popular. 'big vehicles' better as 'large vehicles.' Suggestion: simplify and clarify: 'in developing countries like Nepal, some people cannot afford large vehicles like cars.'

× So usually every people are in the road we can see they were riding bikes.

✓ So usually, when we are on the road, we can see many people riding bikes.

'Every people' is incorrect; use 'every person' or 'many people.' 'Are in the road' should be 'when we are on the road' or 'on the road.' Tense 'they were riding' shifts to past unnecessarily; use present 'riding' to match general statement. Suggestion: use 'many people riding bikes' or 'we can see people riding bikes.'