Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on producing a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. For example, start with a past-tense sentence: "Yes, I had a bike when I was a child." Then add a linked detail: "Because my school was close, I often rode it to school every day." Finally, give a short comment about your experience: "I enjoyed it and felt independent." Keep it within 3–4 sentences, using past tense consistently.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. Because my house was only ten minutes from school, I often rode my bike to class every day. Riding made me feel independent and I rarely had any problems with it.

提案: Give a direct opinion, use correct vocabulary, and support it with one or two specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, so, therefore) and avoid pronunciation or word-choice errors (e.g., 'bags' → 'bikes'). Keep sentences concise and coherent. For instance: state your opinion, explain why with a reason, and give a short example of when people ride bikes.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people ride them because cycling is cheap and convenient for short journeys, especially in warm weather. For example, office workers often bike home or go for an evening ride to relax after a long day.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child when was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time frame; also include the article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for memories (I had, I liked).

× I, I, I like to I like to ride a bike to go to school when I was a little.

✓ I liked to ride a bike to go to school when I was little.

The sentence repeats phrases and uses present 'like' with past time reference. Use past simple 'liked' for past habits. Also 'a little' is incorrect; use 'little' or 'a child'. Suggestion: Remove repetitions and use past simple for past habits (I liked to ride...).

× There is no difficulties.

✓ There were no difficulties.

The phrase uses singular 'is' with plural 'difficulties'. For past reference use plural verb 'were'. Suggestion: Match verb number to noun and tense to context (There were no difficulties).

× So I will need a have a chat.

✓ So I will need to have a chat.

The phrase has an extra article 'a' and incorrect verb sequence 'need a have'. Use the infinitive 'need to have'. Suggestion: Use 'need to' + base verb for future intention (I will need to have a chat).

× Yes, get there.

✓ Yes, I got there.

Fragment 'get there' lacks subject and correct tense. In context of past events use past simple 'got' and include subject 'I'. Suggestion: Complete the sentence with subject and correct tense (I got there).

× Absolutely, I think bags are popular in my country in everyone has their own hobbies to ride a bike to relaxed when not when they feel the warm out and feel tired from the work so they always in in their free time to ride bikes to relax themselves.

✓ Absolutely, I think bikes are popular in my country; everyone has their own hobby of riding a bike to relax when the weather is warm and they feel tired from work, so they often ride bikes in their free time to relax.

Multiple tense and word-choice errors: 'bags' should be 'bikes'; 'everyone has their own hobbies to ride' is ungrammatical—use 'hobby of riding'; 'to relaxed' should be 'to relax'; 'when not when they feel the warm out' is unclear—use 'when the weather is warm'; 'from the work' should be 'from work'; redundant 'in in' removed; plural/singular consistency adjusted. Suggestion: Use clear noun choices and correct verb forms (hobby of riding, to relax), maintain consistent tense and remove repetitions.