Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and natural but too brief. To improve, give a clear topic sentence then add one or two supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, who gave it to you, or a memory) using a linking word to make it coherent. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend. Because it had training wheels at first, I learned to balance gradually and felt very proud when I finally rode without them.

提案: The idea is clear but phrasing and vocabulary need correction and more detail. Avoid unclear words (e.g., 'Spike' seems incorrect). Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific reasons and an example or brief comparison using linking words like 'because' or 'however'.

例: Not really — bikes are not very popular in the Philippines because the climate is hot and humid, which makes cycling uncomfortable for many people. In addition, traffic congestion and a lack of safe bike lanes discourage people from using bicycles, so most prefer motorcycles or cars for daily travel.

× 'No, not really, because it's very hot in the Philippines, so very few people use Spike.'

✓ 'No, not really, because it is very hot in the Philippines, so very few people use bikes.'

'The original sentence has a subject-verb agreement and word choice issue: the pronoun it correctly contracts to it is (it's) but the main problem is the noun Spike which is likely a typo or incorrect noun; singular Proper noun Spike does not agree with context. The plural subject very few people requires the plural noun bikes. Correcting to bikes makes the noun agree with the plural subject and fits the context of the question about bicycles. Suggestion: use the plural noun that matches very few people and ensure the noun correctly refers to bicycles. Additionally maintain the contraction it is (it's) for natural speech.'