Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases (e.g., "at that time" and "actually" together) and correct grammar ("I had" not "I do have").

例: I had a small three-wheeled bike when I was a child. It looked a little odd, but the extra wheels helped me keep my balance because I didn't know how to ride a two-wheeled bike yet.

提案: Provide a concise direct opinion followed by two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetitive phrases ("in my country" used repeatedly). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "infrastructure" instead of "roads designed just for vehicles").

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because the infrastructure favors cars over bicycles. For example, there are no dedicated cycle lanes and traffic laws offer little protection for cyclists, so many people feel unsafe riding.

× Yeah, I do have a small bike when I was a child and that bike was with three wheels.

✓ Yeah, I had a small bike when I was a child and that bike had three wheels.

Tense inconsistency: 'do have' is present tense while 'when I was a child' requires past tense. Use simple past 'had' to match the time reference. Also 'was with three wheels' is awkward; use 'had three wheels'. Suggestion: Use past simple for actions or possessions in the past (I had, the bike had).

× It looks quite weird, but I think those two wheels are only for me to keep balance when at that time I don't even know how to ride a bike actually.

✓ It looked quite weird, but I think those two wheels were only to help me keep my balance because at that time I didn't even know how to ride a bike.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'looks' and 'don't even know' are present tense while referring to past events; use past forms 'looked' and 'didn't'. 'are only for me to keep balance' is awkward; use 'were only to help me keep my balance'. Also include possessive 'my balance'. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent and use natural phrasing like 'to help me keep my balance'.

× No, I don't think bikes are quite popular in my country.

✓ No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country.

Word choice/adverb use: 'quite popular' can be grammatical but sounds odd with 'don't think'; 'very popular' more clearly conveys the intended meaning. This is a present-tense opinion so present simple 'don't think' is correct; replace 'quite' with 'very' for naturalness. Suggestion: Use adverbs that match the intended degree (very, quite, fairly).

× You know, all the roads here in my country are designed just for vehicles, not for bikes.

✓ You know, the roads in my country are designed for vehicles, not for bikes.

Wordiness and preposition use: 'here in my country' is redundant; 'designed just for' is acceptable but 'designed for' is simpler. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing and correct prepositions: 'designed for vehicles'.

× And there is no special lane for cyclists and the traffic rules are not friendly to those people who ride a bike.

✓ There are no special lanes for cyclists, and the traffic rules are not friendly to people who ride bikes.

Plural agreement and pronoun use: 'there is no special lane' should be plural 'there are no special lanes' to match general statement. 'Those people who ride a bike' is awkward; use 'people who ride bikes'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural and use natural plural phrasing for generalizations.