Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and repeated phrases. Also correct verb forms (e.g., “enjoyed” not “enjoying”) and plural usage.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child, and I often rode it in the park near my house. Because bikes were new to me then, I enjoyed learning to balance and racing my friends, which made weekends very fun.

提案: Answer directly and give one clear reason with a specific example. Use coherent linking words (e.g., “because” or “for example”) and correct sentence structure. Remove hesitations and redundant qualifiers like “like” and repeated pronouns.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and leisure. For example, when I was a child I often hung out with friends on our bikes, especially in suburban areas where cycling paths are common.

× I used to ride a bike in a park near my house and I really enjoying it because yeah, for our kids, just a normal kids, it was very like new things that I, I, I had never experienced.

✓ I used to ride a bike in a park near my house and I really enjoyed it because, for us kids, something as normal as that felt very new to me; I had never experienced it before.

The phrase 'I really enjoying it' is incorrect because after 'I' the verb needs the past form 'enjoyed' to match 'used to' (habit in the past). This is a Verb + -ing form error. Also 'for our kids, just a normal kids' is ungrammatical: use 'for us kids' (correct pronoun and number agreement) and 'something as normal as that' is clearer. Suggestion: use past simple 'enjoyed' with 'used to' and correct noun phrase to 'us kids' and 'something as normal as that' to express the idea clearly.

× for our kids, just a normal kids, it was very like new things that I, I, I had never experienced.

✓ for us kids, something as normal as that felt very new to me; I had never experienced it before.

The phrase mixes singular and plural: 'our kids' and 'a normal kids' is incorrect. This is a singular and plural issue. Use 'us kids' (plural collective) and 'something' (singular) or 'new things' consistently. Suggestion: decide singular or plural and keep agreement: 'for us kids' and 'something as normal as that' or 'for us kids, these things felt very new.'

× I used to ride a bike in a park near my house and I really enjoying it because yeah, for our kids, just a normal kids, it was very like new things that I, I, I had never experienced.

✓ I used to ride a bike in a park near my house and I really enjoyed it because, for us kids, something as normal as that felt very new to me; I had never experienced it before.

The speaker describes past habitual actions ('used to'), so accompanying verbs should be in past tense. 'Really enjoying' is present participle and mismatches the past context. Also 'it was very like new things' is awkward; use past tense 'felt' and 'had never experienced' is correct for prior experience. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistency: 'used to' + past verbs like 'enjoyed' and 'felt.'

× for our kids, just a normal kids, it was very like new things that I, I, I had never experienced.

✓ for us kids, something as normal as that felt very new to me; I had never experienced it before.

Using 'our kids' is incorrect in this context because the speaker refers to themselves and peers; 'us kids' is appropriate. Repeating 'kids' with 'a normal kids' is ungrammatical. This is an incorrect use of pronouns issue. Suggestion: use 'us kids' or 'we kids' to refer to the speaker and peers.

× So it's a new thing to like.

✓ So it was a new thing to me.

'So it's a new thing to like' is fragmented and ungrammatical: tense mismatch ('it's' present) and the phrase 'to like' is extraneous. This is a sentence structure error. Suggestion: keep past tense and clarify the object: 'So it was a new thing to me' or 'So I liked it because it was new to me.'

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country? Student: Yes, I think so because I although the transportations are really structured, but I, I used to go out like hang out with my friends with by bike when I was like a child.

✓ Yes, I think so because although the transport system is well organized, I used to hang out with my friends on a bike when I was a child.

Multiple issues: 'the transportations' is incorrect—use 'the transport system' or 'transportation' (article error and noun choice). Also 'with by bike' mixes prepositions. This suggestion focuses on article and noun usage: 'the transport system' or no article with 'transportation' depending on intended meaning. Suggestion: use 'the transport system' and 'on a bike' for correct preposition.

× I used to go out like hang out with my friends with by bike when I was like a child.

✓ I used to hang out with my friends on a bike when I was a child.

The phrase 'with by bike' incorrectly combines prepositions; correct preposition for riding is 'on' (on a bike). Also 'go out like hang out' is redundant; use 'hang out.' This is an incorrect use of prepositions. Suggestion: simplify to 'hang out with my friends on a bike.'

× Yes, I think so because I although the transportations are really structured, but I, I used to go out like hang out with my friends with by bike when I was like a child.

✓ Yes, I think so because although the transport system is well organized, I used to hang out with my friends on a bike when I was a child.

The sentence has mixed conjunctions ('because I although... but') and redundancy ('go out like hang out'), causing a sentence structure error. Remove extra conjunctions and choose one cohesive structure: 'although the transport system is well organized, I used to hang out with my friends on a bike.' Suggestion: avoid stacking conjunctions and redundant phrases.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country? Student: Yes, I think so because I although the transportations are really structured, but I, I used to go out like hang out with my friends with by bike when I was like a child. So I think it's very popular.

✓ Yes, I think so because although the transport system is well organized, I used to hang out with my friends on a bike when I was a child. So I think they are very popular.

At the end 'So I think it's very popular' uses 'it' and singular verb 'is' to refer to bikes (plural). This is a third person singular / number reference issue. Use 'they are' to refer to 'bikes.' Suggestion: match pronoun and verb number to the noun: 'bikes' -> 'they are.'