Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate with tense and grammar, avoid repetition, and make the answer coherent with linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “and” or “besides”). Correct verb forms (e.g., ‘sometimes we went’). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I often rode it to the local park and sometimes to nearby hills with my friends, and we enjoyed exploring trails together. Those outings were great fun because we raced each other and discovered new paths.

提案: Answer directly, use accurate tense and avoid repetition. Provide one or two specific reasons or examples and use linking words to connect ideas (for example, ‘because’, ‘also’, ‘for instance’). Finish the sentence clearly instead of trailing off.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work and school. Also, people ride bikes for leisure on weekends, for instance on coastal paths and short countryside trips.

× When I was a child, I had a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses past tense to refer to a past possession.

× I usually went to park and mountains with my friends.

✓ I usually went to the park and the mountains with my friends.

Missing definite articles before countable nouns 'park' and 'mountains'. Use 'the' when referring to specific places familiar to speaker. Also include 'the' before plural geographic features when specific.

× Sometime we go to the trails.

✓ Sometimes we went to the trails.

The context is past (When I was a child...), so the verb should be in past tense. Also 'Sometime' is incorrect; use 'Sometimes' for habitual actions.

× It was really fun to go with friends and.

✓ It was really fun to go with friends.

Sentence ends with an extraneous conjunction 'and' creating a sentence fragment. Remove 'and' to complete the sentence.

× Well, I think bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Well, I think bikes are very popular in my country.

No correction needed; present tense appropriately expresses a general opinion.

× People mostly used to commute for work and for entertainment purposes such as such as small trips and.

✓ People mostly used bikes to commute for work and for entertainment purposes such as small trips.

Original mixes 'used to' incorrectly and repeats 'such as'. 'Used to' should be followed by base verb; include the object 'bikes' for clarity. Remove trailing 'and' to avoid sentence fragment.