Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use correct tense and a clear, natural structure. Start with a direct topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two brief supporting details (where you rode it or a memory). Keep it under 5 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon after school, and sometimes my friends and I raced each other. It was a red bicycle with a bell, which I loved because it made me feel independent.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first (Yes/No) then explain with specific reasons and one brief example. Use linking words (however, because, for example) to make your response coherent. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid filler words.

例: No, bikes are not very popular in my country because most people prefer cars and motorbikes for convenience and speed. For example, city roads are busy and public transport is limited, so many families buy cars rather than bicycles.

× Yes, I have a bike when I am child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about possession in the past, so the student should use past tense. 'Have' should be past 'had' and 'am child' is incorrect; use past tense 'was' and include the article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: use 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× No, it's not most popular in my country.

✓ No, it is not very popular in my country.

The student is trying to say that bikes are not popular. 'Most popular' is incorrect here; use 'very popular' or 'the most popular' with context. Also 'it's' refers to 'it is' but subject should be 'bikes' or 'they'. Suggestion: say 'Bikes are not very popular in my country.'

× My country the popular and then translates and then popular.

✓ In my country, cars and motorcycles are more popular.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. It lacks verbs and proper structure. Rephrase to state the comparison clearly: 'cars and motorcycles are more popular.' Include a subject and verb and proper noun order. Suggestion: 'In my country, cars and motorcycles are more popular.'

× It was umm cars and motors.

✓ It was cars and motorcycles.

The filler 'umm' should be removed in written form. 'Motors' is not the correct term here; use 'motorcycles' or 'motorbikes'. Keep past tense 'was' only if referring to past preference; otherwise use present 'are'. Suggestion: 'It was cars and motorcycles.' or 'They were cars and motorcycles.'

× Just this not bike.

✓ Bikes were just not popular.

This fragment lacks a clear subject and verb. Rearrangement and addition of verb 'were' makes it a complete sentence. Use plural 'bikes' to match general statement. Suggestion: 'Bikes were just not popular.'

× Bike not popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are not popular in my country.

Missing auxiliary verb 'are' for present-tense negative statement and plural noun form 'bikes' to speak generally. Add 'are' and make 'bike' plural. Suggestion: 'Bikes are not popular in my country.'