Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct tense and article usage. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “because” or “so”). Avoid unnecessary fillers like “well” and incorrect grammar such as “I have not any.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. Instead, I usually walked to school or took a bus because my family lived fairly close to the school and we couldn’t afford extra bikes.

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Begin with a clear opinion (e.g., “Yes, they are quite popular.”), then give two specific reasons linked with connectors such as “because” or “so.” Remove hesitations (“uh”) and incorrect phrases (“as if they create a mass traffic lot”). Use clearer vocabulary: “cause heavy traffic” or “reduce congestion.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheaper and easier to park. Also, many people prefer bikes for short commutes to avoid heavy traffic and reduce travel time.

× Well, I have not any bike when I was a child.

✓ Well, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time expression 'when I was a child'. Use the past simple 'did not have' for a negative statement about the past. Also 'not any' is unidiomatic here; use 'did not have a bike' or 'didn't have any bikes.' Ensure tense consistency by keeping verbs in the past for past-time contexts.

× Well, I think so that bikes are uh, quite popular in my country as people used to travel to their offices, schools or colleges with the help of a bike, generally, uh, instead of cars, as if they create a mass traffic lot.

✓ Well, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because people often travel to work, school, or college by bike rather than by car, which helps reduce traffic congestion.

The original sentence has awkward structure and several issues: 'I think so that' is incorrect — use 'I think' followed by the clause or 'I think that' without 'so'. 'Used to' implies past habit; use 'often' or 'frequently' for current habits. 'With the help of a bike' is wordy — 'by bike' is natural. 'As if they create a mass traffic lot' is ungrammatical and unclear; the intended meaning appears to be about traffic congestion, so use 'which helps reduce traffic congestion.' Reorganize the sentence for clarity and correct verb forms, prepositions, and idiomatic expressions.