Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear. Start with a simple topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (past tense for childhood), avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases, and keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like "but" or "however" to connect ideas.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents were worried about safety, so they didn't allow me to ride one. As a result, I usually walked or took the bus to school.

提案: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and one brief example. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and cohesive devices like "because", "therefore", or "for example". Avoid vague phrases and limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and practical for short trips. For example, many commuters ride bikes to work to avoid traffic, especially in smaller cities.

× Do I have any bike in Chilean?

✓ Did I have a bike in Chile?

The speaker is answering a past-tense question, so use past tense 'did' not present 'do'. 'Chilean' is an adjective; the correct noun for the country is 'Chile'. Also use 'a bike' (singular countable) not 'any bike' in this direct question form. Suggestion: Use 'Did I have a bike in Chile?' for a clear past-tense question about possession.

× Because in Chilean we didn't know how to have a ride and my parents didn't allow me to ride a bike.

✓ In Chile we did not know how to ride a bike, and my parents did not allow me to ride.

'Chilean' is the adjective; use 'Chile' for the country noun. 'Know how to have a ride' is incorrect phrasing — use 'know how to ride a bike.' Maintain past tense with 'did not' for both clauses and avoid repeating 'ride a bike' unnecessarily. Suggestion: Use 'In Chile we did not know how to ride a bike, and my parents did not allow me to ride.'

× Bike is wonderful sensitive machine with children can buy.

✓ A bike is a wonderful, safe machine that children can buy.

Missing articles: use 'A bike' and repeat article before the noun 'machine' or rephrase. 'Sensitive' is incorrect adjective for bikes; 'safe' or 'useful' fits better. Also the relative clause needs 'that children can buy' to connect properly. Suggestion: Use 'A bike is a wonderful, safe machine that children can buy.'

× Is bikes popular in our country?

✓ Are bikes popular in our country?

Subject-verb agreement with 'there be' type: the sentence is a question about plural 'bikes', so use 'are' not 'is'. Form a proper subject-verb inversion for questions about plural subjects. Suggestion: Use 'Are bikes popular in our country?'

× Many people has usually used this because it will make our work easier, faster and more confident comfortable.

✓ Many people usually use them because they make our work easier, faster, and more comfortable.

'Many people' is plural, so use 'use' not 'has used'. 'Usually' should come before the main verb 'use'. 'This' is unclear for plural 'bikes' — use 'them' or 'bikes'. 'Will make' shifts to future unnecessarily; present simple 'make' is appropriate when describing general truths. 'More confident comfortable' is ungrammatical — choose 'more comfortable' or 'more confident' depending on meaning; here 'more comfortable' fits. Suggestion: 'Many people usually use them because they make our work easier, faster, and more comfortable.'

× So bike is popular and all almost all people have bike in our country.

✓ So bikes are popular and almost all people have a bike in our country.

Use plural 'bikes are' when speaking generally, not 'bike is'. 'All almost all' is redundant; use 'almost all'. When saying individuals possess one, use 'a bike'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'bikes are popular'. Suggestion: 'So bikes are popular and almost all people have a bike in our country.'