Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer directly addresses the question but is informal and slightly unclear. Improve clarity by using a concise topic sentence, correct grammar, and a brief supporting detail. Avoid contractions like "gonna" in formal tests and correct wording (e.g., "practice riding a bike"). Use one linking phrase to connect the reason.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. The main reason was that no adult could supervise me while I practiced riding, so my parents thought it would be unsafe. As a result, I learned to cycle much later, when I was a teenager.

提案: Your answer is relevant but repetitive and slightly ungrammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Remove repeated phrases like "in my country" and fix grammar (e.g., "there is a tourist area where people can cycle around, although there is a time limit").

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, there is a well-known tourist area where people often rent bikes to cycle around the park, although rentals usually have a set time limit. Also, many locals use bicycles for short trips in coastal towns.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child since no one was gonna watch me practice my bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because no one was going to watch me practice riding it.

The sentence mixes informal contraction 'gonna' with past tense context; use 'was going to' or 'were going to' for past intention. Also 'practice my bike' is incorrect collocation; the correct verb is 'practice riding it' or 'learn to ride it'. 'Since' can mean 'because' but may be ambiguous; 'because' is clearer here.

× Yeah, I think bikes in are popular in my country since there's a tourist spot here in my country that you can bike all around it, but there's a time limit that is given to you.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country because there is a tourist spot where you can ride a bike all around, but there is a time limit for visitors.

Remove the misplaced preposition 'in' after 'bikes'. Use 'because' instead of 'since' for clarity. 'Here in my country' is redundant; simplify to 'there is'. 'You can bike all around it' is awkward; use 'ride a bike all around'. 'Time limit that is given to you' is wordy; use 'time limit for visitors' or 'a time limit'.