Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and organize your response with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete fragments. Focus on correct verb forms and word order (e.g., 'I got a bicycle from my father' and 'I liked doing sports'). Keep your answer to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child because my father bought one for me so I could learn to ride. I loved sports, so I used the bike to go to the park and explore my neighborhood with friends.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence, then provide specific reasons using clear linking words. Avoid filler sounds and incomplete phrases. Use correct word choices (e.g., 'delivery workers' rather than unclear fragments) and give 1–2 concrete examples of why bikes are popular (transport, cost, delivery jobs). Keep sentences concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many delivery workers use bicycles to deliver food quickly in busy city areas, and people also ride bikes for exercise and leisure.

× I I back from my father to get a bicycle because I think I should learn to bike.

✓ I asked my father to get a bicycle because I wanted to learn to ride.

The original sentence has repeated word 'I I' and incorrect verb choices and structure. Use 'asked my father to get' for requesting and 'wanted to learn to ride' to match past intention. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, use correct verbs ('ask' for request, 'ride' for riding a bicycle) and keep past tense for a childhood action.

× Bicycle when I was small and I like doing sports so much so a bicycle can ride everywhere.

✓ I had a bicycle when I was small, and I liked doing sports a lot, so I could ride the bicycle everywhere.

The original lacks a clear subject-verb structure and mixes tenses. Use past tense 'had' and 'liked' to describe childhood, and 'could ride' to express ability in the past. Also include articles ('a bicycle') and proper connectors ('and', 'so') for clarity.

× It's not so.

✓ That's not true.

'It's not so' is unnatural in this context. Use the common phrase 'That's not true' to negate the previous statement. Also ensure pronoun 'that' refers clearly to the idea being negated.

× I think the answer is yes, because not only for hobbies, umm also for.

✓ I think the answer is yes, because bikes are used not only for hobbies but also for work.

The original is incomplete and lacks necessary verbs and objects. Use present tense 'are used' to describe general facts, and complete the contrast with 'not only... but also...' followed by a parallel noun ('work'). This corrects sentence completeness and parallel structure.

× For cater take away have a job off riding bike TE sent the meals to.

✓ Delivery workers use bikes to deliver takeaway food as part of their jobs.

The original is ungrammatical and contains word order and vocabulary errors. Rephrase to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'Delivery workers use bikes to deliver takeaway food.' Use 'deliver' as the verb for sending meals and 'as part of their jobs' to indicate purpose. Maintain present tense for general facts.