Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct past-tense response, use correct grammar, avoid repetition, and add one short specific reason or detail. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words if adding details.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I usually walked to school because we lived close by, so a bike wasn't necessary. Also, my family couldn't afford one at the time.

提案: Answer directly, use clear sentence structure and present-tense general statements. Provide a specific reason or example and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases and unnecessary details.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, in my neighborhood there are many shops selling various models, and some high-end brands are especially popular among young riders.

× No, I don't have any bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student must use past tense. 'Do not have' is present. Also 'any bike' is unnatural here; 'a bike' is appropriate in negative past. Suggestion: use past simple 'didn't have' for past possession.

× I I just, I just walk in.

✓ I just walked.

This refers to a past habitual action, so past simple 'walked' is required instead of present 'walk'. The phrase 'walk in' is unnecessary and unclear. Keep it concise: 'I just walked.' Suggestion: use past simple for past actions and avoid redundant words.

× I just walk a bearing foot.

✓ I just walked on foot.

The phrase 'a bearing foot' is incorrect English. Use the collocation 'walked on foot' or simply 'walked'. Past tense 'walked' matches the question. Suggestion: replace incorrect noun phrase with 'on foot' or 'by foot' and use past tense.

× Yes, so my new is my home near shop in which a very heavy bike and most expensive in bike name is CCPO bike.

✓ Yes. Near my home and the shop there is a very heavy and expensive bike called the CCPO bike.

This sentence has multiple issues: incorrect word order, missing articles, and wrong tense forms. 'My new is my home near shop' is unintelligible; likely intended 'near my home and the shop'. Use 'there is' to state existence and include articles 'a' and 'the'. 'Most expensive in bike name is CCPO bike' should be 'a very heavy and expensive bike called the CCPO bike.' Suggestion: break into clearer clauses, use 'there is' for existence, include appropriate articles, and use 'called' to name the bike.