Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your response repeated the examiner's question and then shifted to a different but related topic (popularity of bikes) before briefly mentioning your own experience. To improve: (1) Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence about whether you had a bike; (2) Add one or two specific supporting details (age, where you rode, a short memory) using linking words such as "Yes," "When I was..." or "I remember that..."; (3) Avoid repeating the examiner and avoid unnecessary repetition. Keep your answer natural and within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I learned to ride it when I was nine, and I used to ride around our neighborhood every afternoon. I remember racing my friends to the park, which was always fun.

× And personally, I learned to ride a bicycle when I was 9 and it's really fun riding bicycle.

✓ And personally, I learned to ride a bicycle when I was nine, and it's really fun to ride a bicycle.

The sentence has two issues that match the 'Verb + -ing form' category: the phrase 'it's really fun riding bicycle' needs a gerund or infinitive structure that fits English usage, and the countable noun 'bicycle' requires an article. Use 'to ride a bicycle' or 'riding a bicycle' with the article. Also spell out single-digit ages in formal writing ('nine'), and include a comma before the conjunction joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: use 'I learned to ride a bicycle when I was nine, and it's really fun to ride a bicycle.'