Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use past tense consistently, avoid filler words, and give a short clear description with one or two supporting details. Start with a topic sentence, then add specific details (color, size, who you rode with, or a memory). Keep it under five sentences and use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small green bicycle that I used to ride around my neighborhood. It was quite lightweight and had a little basket on the front, so I often took my toys with me when I went out.

提案: Answer directly, use clear reasons and linking words to connect ideas, and use appropriate vocabulary and grammar. Say whether you think bikes are popular, then give one or two specific reasons (e.g., car ownership, infrastructure). Avoid fragmented sentences and repetitions.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular nowadays. Because most families own cars, people prefer driving for convenience; additionally, cities lack safe bike lanes, which discourages cycling for daily travel.

× Yes, I have a bag.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The student was asked about having a bike when they were a child (past time). The original sentence uses present tense 'have' and refers to 'a bag' which is likely a miswording instead of 'bike'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time reference and the correct noun 'bike'. Suggestion: say 'I had a bike' for past possession.

× When I'm a child, I have a. Uh, I have a green color and small back.

✓ When I was a child, I had a small green bike.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'I'm' and 'have' while describing past time; it also has word order and vocabulary errors ('green color' and 'small back' are incorrect for describing a bike). Use past tense 'was' and 'had' to match 'when I was a child'. Combine adjectives in correct order ('small green bike'). Suggestion: use 'When I was a child, I had a small green bike.'

× I don't think so, no.

✓ I don't think so.

The original repeats negative affirmation 'so, no' which is redundant. The phrase 'I don't think so' is sufficient and is correctly in present tense for a general opinion. Suggestion: respond with 'I don't think so.'

× Now they nowaday because.

✓ Nowadays bicycles are less common because...

The sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete: 'Now they nowaday because' mixes adverb forms and lacks a main clause explaining the reason. Use 'Nowadays' and provide a full clause, e.g., 'Nowadays bicycles are less common because...' Suggestion: complete the sentence by stating the reason, for example 'Nowadays bicycles are less common because many families have cars.'

× There are many. Cars every family.

✓ Many families have cars.

The original splits the idea into fragments and misorders words: 'There are many. Cars every family.' should be a single clause stating ownership. Use 'Many families have cars' or 'There are cars in many families.' Suggestion: 'Many families have cars.'