Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use past tense for a past question; expand slightly with one topic sentence and one supporting detail. Keep it natural and concise. For example, state you had a bike, mention what you used it for or a brief memory, using 1–3 sentences and proper linking.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike that I rode to a friend’s house and around the neighborhood almost every day, which helped me learn balance and made my childhood very active.

提案: Organize ideas with a clear topic sentence, use linking words, correct grammar, and be specific. Limit to 2–4 sentences: state your opinion, give one or two specific reasons (e.g., short commutes, cost savings, environmental benefits), and add a brief example. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense/word forms.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. Many workers use bicycles for short commutes because they are cheaper than motorbikes and reduce fuel costs. Moreover, cycling is better for the environment, so it is a practical choice in crowded cities.

× Yes, I do.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner asked about having a bike when the student was a child, which is a past-time question. The student answered with the present tense 'do', causing a tense mismatch. Use the past tense 'did' to match the time frame of 'when you were a child'. Suggestion: match the tense of your answer to the tense indicated by the question (use past tense for past events).

× For me, bikes are popular in my country, especially here in the Philippines since some of those workers are using that for travel purposes when especially their work was just nearby and it also saves the fuel consumption as well As for the environment.

✓ Bikes are popular in the Philippines because many workers use them to travel short distances, which also saves fuel and benefits the environment.

The original sentence is wordy and contains several structural and grammatical issues: awkward phrasing ('for me' is unnecessary), incorrect tense and aspect ('are using' and 'was just nearby' mixed), inappropriate demonstrative ('those workers'), redundancy ('fuel consumption as well As for the environment'), and improper capitalization. The corrected sentence simplifies structure, uses the simple present 'use' to describe a general fact, replaces 'those workers' with 'many workers', uses 'short distances' instead of the awkward clause, and links the benefits (fuel saving and environmental benefit) clearly. Suggestions: remove unnecessary phrases, use simple present for general facts, keep parallel structure when listing benefits, and avoid redundant words like 'as well' together with 'also'.}]} } அழ