Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense and clarity. Use past tense for past situations, make a clear topic sentence and add a short supporting detail. Keep it natural and concise (1–3 sentences).

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school or rode public transport with my friends.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, use linking words, correct grammar and give a specific reason or example. Avoid repetition and keep it within 2–3 sentences. Use vocabulary like "common/popular," "commuting," and "inexpensive."

例: In my opinion, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes. For example, they are affordable and often faster than cars in heavy traffic, so students and office workers choose bikes for daily travel.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student is describing a past situation, so past tense is required. 'Don't have' is present tense and incorrect here; use 'didn't have'. Also 'a child' needs the article 'a'. Suggestion: use past simple for past facts (subject + did not + base verb) and include articles where needed.

× My point point my point of view bikes are popular in my country because bike sales a lot or and fast work.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are popular in my country because many people buy them and they are useful for quick journeys.

The original sentence has repetition ('my point point my point of view'), missing articles, incorrect verb forms ('bike sales a lot'), and unclear phrase 'fast work'. Correct by using a clear phrase 'In my opinion' or 'From my point of view', use plural or quantifier with countable nouns ('many people buy them'), and express purpose/benefit correctly ('useful for quick journeys'). Suggestions: avoid repetition, choose appropriate quantifiers for countable nouns, and use clear vocabulary for reasons (e.g., 'useful for short or quick journeys').