Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear with tense and sentence structure, give a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar: use past tense for childhood and a clearer time reference. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid unnecessary words.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it before I started eighth grade, and I used to ride it to school and around my neighborhood almost every day.

提案: Use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer reasons with linking words. Start with a direct opinion, then give a specific, coherent reason and an example or consequence. Avoid vague phrasing like “so many off road.”

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because we have many rural roads and short distances between towns. For example, many people use bikes for commuting to markets and schools, especially in smaller communities.

× Yes, I have a bike before I study at 8 class, then I ride the bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike before I studied in 8th grade, and then I rode the bike.

The student is talking about past events, so present tense verbs ('have', 'study', 'ride') are incorrect. Use simple past ('had', 'studied', 'rode'). Also '8 class' is unidiomatic; use '8th grade' or 'grade 8'. Use 'and' to connect the two past actions for clarity.

× Yes, I think bike is a very popular in our country because it's so many off road.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because there are so many off-road areas.

Several errors here: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match 'popular' about general category (singular/plural issue). Use 'are' with plural subject. 'a very popular' is wrong because 'popular' is an adjective that needs no 'a' when describing plural noun. 'it's so many off road' is ungrammatical: use 'there are' to introduce existence, and 'off-road areas' (countable) to express locations. This fixes subject-verb agreement and noun count problems.