Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and complete: start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief specific detail and a reason. Use correct grammar (e.g., “Yes, I did” not “Yes I had”) and avoid one-word answers. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was about eight, but it was quite uncomfortable because the seat was very hard. However, I loved riding it to my friend’s house on weekends, so I kept using it until I saved up for a better one.

提案: Clarify the main idea and correct word choice (you said “bags” instead of “bikes”). Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Avoid repetition and aim for natural phrasing.

例: Yes, I do. Bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and healthy way to travel. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips to work or school, and several cities have built bike lanes to make cycling safer.

× Yes I had, but it was uncomfortable.

✓ Yes, I did, but it was uncomfortable.

The question uses past tense 'Did you have', which requires the short past tense response 'Yes, I did' rather than 'Yes I had'. 'Had' is the past simple of 'have' but when responding to a did-question English uses the auxiliary did. Suggestion: answer 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had a bike' for clarity.

× Yes, I do. I think bags are popular everywhere because that's a really comfortable and healthy transport.

✓ Yes, I do. I think bikes are popular everywhere because they are a really comfortable and healthy form of transport.

The student used 'bags' instead of 'bikes', which is likely a word choice mistake causing semantic error; this is a sentence structure/content error tied to incorrect noun choice. Also 'that's' (that is) followed by 'a really comfortable and healthy transport' is awkward: 'transport' is an uncountable noun here, so use 'a form of transport' or 'transportation', and refer back with 'they' for plural 'bikes'. Suggestion: replace 'bags' with 'bikes', use 'they are' to match plural subject, and say 'a really comfortable and healthy form of transport' or 'a comfortable and healthy way to travel'.