Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense and fix grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), then give one or two concise supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., so, therefore, because) and avoid repetition and filler words. Also correct vocabulary errors (e.g., “go to the boss” → “go to my parents' workplace” or “go to work”). Aim for 2–4 sentences and check subject-verb agreement.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. As a result, I usually walked to school and sometimes walked to my parents' workplace, which took about 20 minutes each way.

提案: Answer directly with a clear opinion and provide specific reasons or examples. Use present tense for general statements and include linking words (for example, because, so, therefore). Avoid filler sounds like “uh” and complete the sentence. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances and avoid traffic. For example, in cities you can see many people cycling to work or school, and there are dedicated bike lanes in several areas.

× Well no I don't have a bike.

✓ Well, no, I didn't have a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use the past tense. Using present tense 'don't have' is incorrect here. Use 'didn't have' to match the past-time reference. Suggestion: Change present simple to past simple for past-time contexts (I didn't have).

× When I was a child my parents couldn't afford 1 so I usually walk to to school and or to go to the boss.

✓ When I was a child my parents couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school or went to the boss.

Multiple issues: 'couldn't afford 1' should be 'couldn't afford one' (spelling/word). The context is past, so habitual actions in the past require past tense 'walked' and 'went' rather than present 'walk' and 'to go'. Also remove duplicate 'to' and extraneous 'and or'. Suggestion: Use past simple for past habitual actions (I usually walked, I went). Replace numeral with word 'one' and simplify conjunction to 'or'.

× Well, of course in my country bike was popular because, uh.

✓ Well, of course, bikes are popular in my country because...

The student shifts tenses incorrectly. If speaking about a general present fact, use present simple: 'bikes are popular'. Also use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. If they meant past, then keep past tense and say 'bikes were popular'. Suggestion: Decide whether you mean present or past generality. For current trends use 'bikes are popular' and use plural form for general statements.