Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail (who gave it and when). Use correct tense and simple vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a red bicycle as a birthday gift when I was eight, and I rode it to school and around the neighborhood every day.

提案: Give a clear direct opinion, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/for instance). Use accurate vocabulary (public transport, convenient) and correct articles and plurals. Keep answers within 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because public transport is convenient and widespread. For example, most people use the subway and buses or travel with rechargeable transit cards, so they rarely choose to cycle.

× Yes, I have a bike when my kid it is my parents fight for my for me as a birthday gift.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; my parents bought it for me as a birthday gift.

Multiple grammar problems: subject-verb tense and agreement, incorrect pronouns, word order, and wrong verb choice. Relevant types: 5 (Past tense issue), 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns), 26 (Sentence structure errors). The sentence refers to the past so use past tense 'had' and 'bought' instead of present forms. Replace 'my kid it is' with 'I was a child' to correctly express the time frame and subject. Remove redundant words 'fight for my for me' and use 'bought it for me' for correct verb usage and word order. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense and clear subject placement: 'I had a bike when I was a child; my parents bought it for me as a birthday gift.'

× Uh, I think it's not popular in my country because we have more convenience, separate convenience, uh, lifestyle, for example, the subway, the bus, the card instead of the buys.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because we have more convenient transportation options, for example the subway, buses, and cars instead of bikes.

Present tense and word choice issues: the sentence uses awkward structure and incorrect words. Relevant types: 6 (Present tense issue), 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions), 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Use 'I don't think bikes are popular' to negate appropriately in present tense. Use 'convenient transportation options' instead of 'more convenience' and list examples with correct nouns 'buses' and 'cars' (not 'buys'). Use 'instead of bikes' to express contrast. Improve clarity by removing filler words and using correct plural forms.