Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần cải thiện thì giờ, chia động từ và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn (Yes/No + thông tin chính), sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (ai dùng, khi nào, nhớ kỷ niệm nào). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I'm a child' (phải là 'I was a child'), 'always buy' (quá khứ: 'always bought') và hoàn thiện danh sách người đi cùng. Giữ không quá 3–4 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child and I often rode it around my village with my sister and my best friend. We usually rode in the afternoons after school and I remember racing each other down the small lanes.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích rõ ràng với lý do cụ thể, dùng thì và trật tự từ đúng. Ví dụ mở đầu bằng 'No, I don't think so' hoặc 'Yes, but…' rồi dùng linking words như 'because' hoặc 'however'. Sửa cấu trúc như 'it convenient' → 'they are more convenient' hoặc 'cars and motorbikes are more convenient'. Tránh lặp từ và tiếng lắp (uh).

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer motorbikes and cars. These vehicles are faster and more convenient for commuting long distances and carrying goods, so bicycles are mostly used for leisure.

× Yes, when I'm a child I always buy a bike around my village.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I always bought a bike in my village.

The sentence mixes present tense with a past time reference. Use past simple (was, bought) for actions and states that happened in the past. Also use 'in my village' rather than 'around my village' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use past tense consistently: 'When I was a child, I always bought a bike in my village.'

× By with my family, my sister, my best friend and a.

✓ I went with my family, my sister and my best friend.

The original fragment is ungrammatical and lacks a clear verb and proper object. It seems intended to list who accompanied the student. Use a full clause with subject and verb ('I went with ...') and a correct list with conjunctions. Remove the stray 'a'.

× I think by uh no popular in my country because most people in my country use use motorbike and car because it convenient.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people use motorbikes and cars, since they are more convenient.

The original contains filler words, repetition, missing auxiliary for negation, word order issues and missing plural/s agreement. Use correct negation 'I don't think', a proper passive or copula 'bikes are not popular', plural nouns 'motorbikes and cars', and 'they are more convenient' for subject-verb agreement. Also remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'use'.