Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and simplify the response. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two brief supporting details (how you learned and when). Use correct tense and avoid unclear phrases like “goodbye with four wheels.” Aim for 2–3 sentences, link them with a simple connector such as “then” or “after that.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. At first I rode a bike with training wheels, and then I practiced a lot until I could ride a two‑wheeler by myself.

提案: Give a direct opinion and support it with two clear reasons. Correct grammatical errors and use cohesive words like “because” or “however.” Replace unclear metaphors (e.g. “heart reader”) with concrete descriptions such as busy streets or lack of infrastructure. Keep the answer to 2–3 sentences and provide a specific example if possible.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because most cities are crowded and there are few bicycle lanes. For example, I rarely see people cycling to work because the roads are busy and unsafe for cyclists.

× Yes, I heard the first one is like goodbye with four wheels, but I practice into the two wheel and then I can ride the two wheel bicycle.

✓ Yes. The first one had four wheels and felt like saying goodbye, but I practiced on the two-wheel bike and then I could ride it.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb forms and word choice. 'Heard' is wrong contextually; student likely means 'the first one had four wheels' (past simple to describe the first bike). 'Goodbye with four wheels' is unclear; I changed to 'felt like saying goodbye' for clarity. 'I practice into the two wheel' uses incorrect verb form and preposition; correct past practice is 'I practiced on the two-wheel bike'. 'Then I can ride' should match past sequence 'then I could ride it'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense when narrating past events, use correct preposition 'on' with 'practice', use hyphen in 'two-wheel' and use 'it' to avoid repetition.

× I think not really, because in my country it's. Is is a like a heart reader and there is not much bicycle lane to to buy.

✓ I don't think so, because in my country cycling is not common and there are not many bicycle lanes.

Errors include incomplete clause 'it's.' and repeated 'Is is', wrong noun phrase 'a heart reader' and wrong verb 'to buy'. I interpreted intended meaning as 'cycling is not common' and corrected to 'cycling is not common' and 'there are not many bicycle lanes.' Use 'I don't think so' for negative response. Use plural 'lanes' with 'many' and use 'there are' for existence of multiple lanes. Suggestion: avoid fragments, use 'there are' for plural existence, and choose accurate vocabulary like 'cycling' and 'bicycle lanes'.