Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse est une répétition de la question et n'apporte aucune information. Pour améliorer, répondez directement par une phrase d'ouverture claire (oui/non + détail), puis ajoutez 1–2 phrases de soutien avec des détails spécifiques (âge, type de vélo, souvenirs) en utilisant des mots de liaison simples comme "when" ou "and". Gardez la réponse naturelle et pas plus de 5 phrases.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was about seven, and I remember learning to ride it in my parents' backyard. It had training wheels at first, but I took them off after a few weeks and was very proud to ride on my own.

提案: La réponse est trop brève et contient une erreur grammaticale. Pour améliorer, commencez par une phrase de position claire (Yes/No/Somewhat) suivie d'une raison précise et d'un exemple concret, en utilisant une conjonction comme "because" ou "because of" pour la cohérence. Utilisez un vocabulaire pertinent (e.g. commuting, environment, affordable) et corrigez la forme: "popular" doit être précédé d'un verbe ou d'un adverbe approprié.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and to save money. For example, in cities you can see bike lanes and many students cycling to school every day.

× Did you have a bike when you were you were a child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

The sentence repeats the phrase 'you were' causing redundancy and an incorrect sentence structure. Remove the duplicated words to form a correct question. Suggestion: proofread to avoid repeated words and read aloud to catch repetition.

× Yes, maybe the popular in my country.

✓ Yes, maybe they are popular in my country.

The original sentence uses the adjective 'popular' without a subject and with an incorrect determiner 'the'. Also 'maybe' needs to modify a verb phrase. Insert the correct subject 'they' (referring to bikes), use the verb 'are' for present plural, and remove the definite article 'the'. Suggestion: identify the subject (bikes) and ensure subject-verb agreement; use 'they are' or 'bikes are' instead of 'the popular'.