Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct grammar (use past tense correctly) and simplify the sentence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words (because / so). Avoid repetition such as “just” and unnecessary fillers like “so.”

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was too afraid to ride one. As a result, I felt more comfortable walking or using other transport.

提案: Make the response more natural and specific. Use clearer vocabulary and reduce repetition (avoid saying “really” twice). Provide a specific reason and an example, using linking words like “because” and “for example.” Fix grammar: “for their work” not “for their works.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and fast way to get around. For example, many commuters and delivery drivers use motorcycles to travel quickly through congested streets.

× No, I really didn't had a bike when I was just a child because I was just very scared to ride a bicycle and I felt very comfortable without riding it so.

✓ No, I really didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was very scared to ride a bicycle and I felt comfortable not riding one.

The auxiliary 'did' requires the base form of the verb, so 'didn't had' is incorrect; it should be 'didn't have'. Also, redundancy and colloquial fillers were simplified: remove repeated 'just' and the trailing 'so', and change 'without riding it' to 'not riding one' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use the base verb after did/didn't and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× Yes, I really think the bikes are really popular in my country because I've seen every individual riding a bike uh, for their works or for their any important works.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because I have seen many people riding bikes for work or other important reasons.

Awkward present tense phrasing and word choice: 'I've seen every individual' is unrealistic and ungrammatical — use 'many people'. 'Their works' is incorrect; use 'work'. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'really'. Also change 'a bike' to 'bikes' for general reference. Suggestion: use 'many people' for general observation and 'for work' to express purpose.

× They are using bikes since it is faster for the transportation.

✓ They use bikes because they are faster for transportation.

The phrase 'are using' plus 'since' with a general statement is inappropriate. Use simple present 'use' for habitual actions. 'Since' suggests time and is awkward here; use 'because'. Also 'for the transportation' is unnatural—use 'for transportation' or 'to get around'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and 'because' to state a reason.