Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammar and make the response more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence using the past tense, then add one brief supporting detail (reason or memory). Keep it within 2–3 sentences. For example, use: “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to visit my friends and practice tricks in the park.” Also avoid repeating unnecessary words.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to school and to visit friends in my neighborhood, which helped me become more independent.

提案: Improve pronunciation and grammar, and organize the answer with a clear topic sentence plus specific reasons. Use linking words (because/so/therefore) and correct word choice ("bikes" not "bias"). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences and give a concrete reason or example (e.g., traffic congestion, cost, short trips).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Thailand because traffic is often severe, so many people choose bicycles or motorbikes for short trips. For example, commuters use motorbikes to save time during rush hour.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' with a past time phrase 'when I was a child'. This is a tense mismatch. Use the past simple 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past situations (I had, I went, I lived).

× Yes, I think bias are popular in my country bikes bike because traffic in Thailand is so very terrible.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because traffic in Thailand is very terrible.

The student wrote 'bias' (typo) and mixed plural/singular words 'bikes bike'. Also used redundant adverb 'so very'. Correct to the plural noun 'bikes' and remove extra word. Suggestion: proofread for typos and keep consistent number (singular/plural) and avoid redundant adverbs.

× We are difficult to use the car, so we use.

✓ It is difficult for us to use cars, so we use bicycles.

The original sentence has incorrect structure 'We are difficult to use the car' and an incomplete clause 'so we use.' Use the impersonal construction 'It is difficult for us to...' and correct object plurality 'cars'. Complete the sentence by stating what is used ('bicycles'). Suggestion: when describing difficulty, use 'It is difficult for someone to do something' and always finish clauses with the object or action.