Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (use past simple: 'rode' or 'used to ride'), remove repetition, and fix prepositions. For example mention how often and why you rode the bike and one specific memory or purpose.

例: Yes. I used to ride a bicycle when I was a child, usually to the nearby market to buy groceries for my family. For example, every Saturday morning I rode about ten minutes to the market and helped my mother choose vegetables and carry them home.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide clear, specific reasons with linking words. Correct sentence structure and word choice (e.g., 'popular', 'because', 'use bicycles to visit relatives and go shopping'). Avoid redundancy and use more precise vocabulary (middle-income families, commute, errands).

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my town because many middle-income families find them affordable and convenient. For example, people often use bikes to visit neighbors, run small errands at local shops, or commute short distances to work or school.

× Of course, when I was a child, I usually drive a bicycle by near market to to buy something for the home.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, I usually rode my bicycle near the market to buy things for the home.

Errors identified: present tense 'drive' is incorrect for a past habitual action (use past tense 'rode'), extra word 'to' is duplicated, preposition use 'by near market' is incorrect (use 'near the market'), and possessive article missing for 'my bicycle'. Also use plural 'things' rather than singular 'something' when referring generally. Suggestion: Use past tense for habits in the past ('usually rode'), include appropriate possessive ('my bicycle'), use correct preposition phrase ('near the market'), remove duplicate 'to', and use 'things' for general items.

× Yes, in my town there are many bikes are popular because of middle class families.

✓ Yes, in my town many bikes are popular because of middle-class families.

Errors: redundant verb 'are' appears twice causing sentence structure error; 'there are many bikes are popular' should be simplified to 'many bikes are popular' or 'there are many popular bikes'. Also 'middle class' should be hyphenated as 'middle-class' when used as an adjective. Suggestion: Remove redundancy, use correct adjective form 'middle-class', and keep simple structure: 'In my town many bikes are popular because of middle-class families.'

× Also buy a bicycle biker for go to neighboring relatives and go to marketing.

✓ Also, people buy bicycles to visit neighboring relatives and to go marketing.

Errors: sentence lacks a clear subject (sentence structure error), word order and verb forms are incorrect ('buy a bicycle biker' is incorrect and unclear), infinitive use should be 'to visit' and 'to go marketing' or better 'to go shopping/marketing'. 'Biker' is the person who rides, not the object. Suggestion: Add a subject such as 'people', use infinitives for purpose ('to visit', 'to go shopping'), and replace 'biker' with 'bicycles' or 'to ride a bicycle' depending on meaning.