Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, pronunciation and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and word order, and avoid filler sounds. Use one or two supporting details (who gave it to you, what it looked like, and a short memory). Use linking words like “and” or “it was” to make it flow. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandfather gave it to me as a present, and it was very small and light so I could ride it easily. I remember learning to cycle in the park near our house, which made me feel very proud.

提案: Make the answer more specific and complete. Begin with a clear opinion, then add 1–2 specific reasons or examples, using linking words such as “because” or “for example.” Avoid trailing off; finish the sentence. Use vocabulary relevant to popularity (commute, exercise, affordable).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work or school. For example, I often see people cycling in the morning and there are many bike lanes in the city, which makes cycling convenient and cheap.

× I where I was a child, I had a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

The original sentence uses 'I where I was a child' which is ungrammatical and likely a word choice/word order error. Replace 'where' with the subordinating conjunction 'when' to introduce the time clause. The corrected sentence has proper clause order and meaning: 'When I was a child' establishes the time frame for the main clause. Suggestion: Use 'when' to talk about time in past-tense background clauses and place the time clause before or after the main clause as needed.

× My grandfather gave me it as present.

✓ My grandfather gave it to me as a present.

The pronoun order 'gave me it' is incorrect in English; the indirect object must come before the direct object only without 'to' (gave me the book) or use 'gave it to me'. Also 'as present' is missing an article; use 'a present'. Suggestion: Use 'gave it to me' or 'gave me a/an + noun' and include the article before 'present'.

× It's a small, small size and uh, and the compacts or compact.

✓ It was small in size and compact.

The original contains repetition 'small, small size', filler 'uh, and', and an unclear phrase 'the compacts or compact'. Also tense should match earlier past context ('had a bike' — use past 'was'). Simplify adjective use: 'small in size' and 'compact' are correct adjective phrases. Suggestion: Avoid unnecessary repetition and fillers; use clear adjective phrases and keep tense consistent.

× I think the bike is very popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country.

Using 'the bike' makes the sentence refer to a specific bike rather than bikes in general. To talk about general popularity, use the plural 'bikes are' or the uncountable 'cycling is'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when referring to things in general: 'Bikes are very popular.'

× I often see the people like this to go out and.

✓ I often see people going out like this.

The phrase 'the people' is unnatural for general observation; 'people' without 'the' is preferred. The original mixes structures 'see people do' and 'to go' incorrectly. Use the -ing form after 'see' for ongoing actions perceived: 'see people going out.' Also remove the trailing 'and'. Suggestion: Use 'see people doing' or 'see people do' depending on meaning; here 'see people going out' sounds natural for observing them leaving.