Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then add a brief reason or short detail. Use one or two linking words and avoid fillers like 'uh'. Aim for 2–3 sentences total.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. My family couldn’t afford one at the time, so I usually walked to school with my friends.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and correct tense. Use linking words (for example/because/so) and avoid hesitations. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use past tense when referring to your childhood.

例: Not really — bicycles aren’t very common in my country outside cities. For example, when I was young and lived in a village, people preferred walking or using motorcycles because distances were short and roads were rough.

× Not really, because, uh, when I was young, I live in the village.

✓ Not really, because, uh, when I was young, I lived in the village.

The sentence mixes past time reference 'when I was young' with a present tense verb 'live'. This is a tense inconsistency. Use the past tense 'lived' to match the time frame. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent with past time markers (e.g., 'when I was young I lived...').