Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, pronunciation and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, use correct past tense forms and articles, avoid filler sounds (umm), and keep to 2–4 concise sentences. Add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., how often you rode, where you rode) and link them with simple connectors (e.g., "and", "so", "because").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was six and I used it to ride to school every day and to play with my friends in the neighborhood. Because our house was close to the school, cycling was quick and fun.

提案: Give a direct clear opinion, use correct grammar and avoid repeated words. Begin with a topic sentence stating your view, then explain reasons with specific examples and linking words like "however", "because", or "instead". Replace fillers with precise vocabulary (e.g., "motorcycles", "private cars").

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Instead, most people prefer motorcycles and private cars because they are faster and more convenient for longer distances. For example, many commuters choose motorbikes to navigate busy streets quickly.

× Yet it is.

✓ No, it wasn't.

The student attempted to answer a past-question about ownership with a present 'There is' structure. The correct response should match the past tense 'Did you have...?' so use 'wasn't' or 'No, I didn't.' Suggestion: answer past questions with past tense (e.g., 'No, I didn't' or 'No, I wasn't').

× I used to have a buy when I were six years old.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was six years old.

Errors: 'buy' is a wrong word choice (should be 'bike') and 'were' is incorrect for singular past tense. Use 'was' with singular first/third person in past tense. Also 'used to' already expresses past habit, so 'when I was six years old' is appropriate. Suggestion: check word choice and use 'was' for I/he/she in past.

× At that time I went to school by bike and I often use it to play and umm, go around my neighbor.

✓ At that time I went to school by bike and I often used it to play and, um, go around my neighborhood.

Mixing past and present tenses: the sentence begins in past ('went') so verbs should stay past ('used'). 'Go around my neighbor' is incorrect phrasing; the noun should be 'neighborhood'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events and use correct noun forms.

× But yeah I don't think so.

✓ But yeah, I don't think so.

Mainly punctuation: add a comma after 'yeah' for natural speech transcription. Tense is present and matches the question about current popularity, so keep present. Suggestion: include commas to reflect pauses.

× But is not popular in my country instead umm motorbike and like private transport are popular in my country.

✓ But it's not popular in my country; instead, motorbikes and private cars are popular.

Problems: missing subject in 'is not popular' — use 'it's' or 'bikes are'. Also 'motorbike and like private transport are' mixes singular/plural and informal fillers. Use plural 'motorbikes' and 'private cars' or 'private transport' consistently. Suggestion: include the subject and keep number agreement and clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'motorbikes and private cars').