Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words (e.g., "uh", "I usually" twice). Also correct prepositions and noun forms (e.g., "relative's house").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to the park with my friends, and sometimes I cycled to my relatives' house which was about a mile away.

提案: Answer more directly and support your opinion with specific, coherent reasons. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and avoid unclear references (e.g., "they", "their") and grammatical errors. Give one or two concrete examples of where and why people use bikes.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, you can see people cycling to nearby shops or parks, and social media reels often show groups of friends riding together on weekends.

× Yes, I had a bike since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence uses 'since' incorrectly with a past simple verb. 'Since' requires a reference to a point in time with present perfect (e.g., 'I have had a bike since I was a child') or, to keep past simple, use 'when' to indicate a past time period. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' for past simple, or 'I have had a bike since I was a child' for present perfect continuity.

× I used to go outside with my friends and sometimes when I visit my relative house, I usually uh, I usually did my using my bike. Sorry.

✓ I used to go out with my friends, and sometimes when I visited my relatives' house I usually rode my bike.

Multiple issues: 1) Mixed tenses 'used to' (past habit) with 'visit' (present) — change 'visit' to past 'visited' to keep past context (Grammar problem type: Present tense issue / Past tense issue). 2) 'go outside' is better phrased as 'go out'. 3) 'relative house' should be 'relatives' house' (possessive plural). 4) 'did my using my bike' is ungrammatical; use 'rode my bike' for past action (correct verb form). 5) Remove redundant 'I usually' duplication. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistently and use correct possessive and verb forms.

× I guess so because I have some I have seen so much reels on Instagram.

✓ I guess so because I have seen so many reels on Instagram.

Errors: 1) Redundant words 'I have some I have seen' — remove repetition. 2) 'so much reels' is incorrect: 'reels' is countable, so use 'so many reels'. 3) Present perfect 'I have seen' is correct to indicate experience up to now. Suggestion: eliminate redundancy and use 'so many' with countable nouns.

× They usually I use bike to go there to visit their neighbor neighborhoods and when they go hangs out with their.

✓ They usually use bikes to visit their neighbors and to hang out together.

Issues: 1) Incorrect word order and extra pronoun 'I' — remove the stray 'I'. 2) Subject-verb agreement: 'They use' not 'I use' in that clause. 3) 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when referring to people in general. 4) 'neighbor neighborhoods' is incorrect — use 'neighbors' (people) or 'neighboring neighborhoods' (areas). Here intended meaning is visiting neighbors, so 'visit their neighbors'. 5) 'when they go hangs out with their' is ungrammatical; use 'to hang out together'. Suggestion: simplify sentence to 'They usually use bikes to visit their neighbors and to hang out together.'