Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct tense and word forms, give a clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail. Avoid filler words. For example, say you didn’t have a bike (past tense) and explain the reason and a brief consequence. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "so" or "therefore."

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. Therefore I usually walked to school, which took about 20 minutes each way.

提案: Make the answer more specific and grammatical: use plural/singular correctly, give one or two concrete reasons and an example. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a linked supporting detail using connectors such as "because" or "for example." Keep it concise and avoid vague phrases like "casually."

例: Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people ride bikes to markets or to commute short distances to work, especially in crowded city areas.

× No, I don't. I didn't have a bike when I was child because my parents didn't afford that time.

✓ No, I didn't. I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one at that time.

Errors: missing article before 'child' and incorrect expression 'didn't afford that time'. Also 'didn't afford' requires an object (what they couldn't afford). Use 'couldn't afford one' to express inability to buy a bike, and 'at that time' to indicate period. Keep past tense consistent with the question about childhood. Grammar problem type ID:26

× That's why I casually, uh, walked in work from today's school.

✓ That's why I usually walked from home to school.

Original is ungrammatical: 'walked in work from today's school' is incoherent. Use 'usually walked' for habitual past action; 'from home to school' specifies route. Remove filler 'uh' and adverb 'casually' which doesn't fit context. Keep past tense to match childhood narrative. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, I believe that bike are popular in my country because it's really helpful when you casually do a something, it's really good for your work and other things is used casually.

✓ Yes, I believe that bikes are popular in my country because they are really helpful for daily errands, work, and other casual uses.

Errors: singular 'bike' with plural verb 'are'—use plural 'bikes are' or change verb. Pronoun/verb agreement and sentence structure: 'it's' should be 'they are' to refer to bikes; 'do a something' is incorrect; 'other things is used' has wrong verb form. Improve clarity by using 'daily errands' and 'casual uses'. Keep present tense for general statement. Grammar problem type ID:27