Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, avoid fillers like “umm” and repetition, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, use past simple and a time phrase, and give a concrete activity or memory.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it in the neighborhood after school, and I especially enjoyed racing my friends on weekends.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use clear grammar (e.g., 'most people' not 'most of people'), link your reasons with connecting words, and provide a specific example or statistic if possible. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people prefer them to cars due to heavy traffic. For instance, commuters often cycle to work to save time and avoid long delays on congested roads.

× Umm, when I was young I usually, I usually riding a bicycle in my free time.

✓ Umm, when I was young I usually rode a bicycle in my free time.

The learner is describing a habitual action in the past and used 'usually' with the base or -ing form 'riding'. In English, habitual past actions require the past tense verb (rode). Use 'usually' + past simple for repeated past actions. Suggestion: replace 'riding' with the past simple 'rode'.

× In my country most of people are riding a bicycle instead of riding a car because in my country there is a lot of traffic jam and most of people riding a bicycle.

✓ In my country most people ride bicycles instead of cars because there is a lot of traffic jam.

Several issues here: 'most of people' is incorrect; the correct form is 'most people' (no 'of' unless followed by 'the' and a specific group). The present simple expresses habitual or general truths, so use 'ride' not 'are riding'. Use plural count noun 'bicycles' and parallel form 'cars'. The clause 'in my country' is redundant twice. Also 'there is a lot of traffic jam' is unidiomatic; better: 'there is a lot of traffic' or 'there are frequent traffic jams'. Suggestion: use 'most people ride bicycles instead of cars because there is a lot of traffic' or '...because there are frequent traffic jams.'

× most of people riding a bicycle

✓ most people ride bicycles

Fragment from the original shows incorrect quantifier and verb form. 'Most of people' should be 'most people'. Use present simple 'ride' to state a general fact. Use plural 'bicycles' when speaking generally. This fixes quantifier and verb tense issues.