Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms. Use a linking phrase if you add extra information (e.g., "because" or "so").

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My mother bought it for me when I was ten, and I used it to ride to school every day because it was faster than walking.

提案: Give a direct, structured answer: a short main idea, then one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words such as "however", "but", or "because" to make the contrast clear when you mention differences between regions or types of bikes.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in some areas, especially in southern cities. However, in most places people prefer electric bikes or electric motorcycles because they are more convenient for longer commutes and hilly terrain.

× I used to have a bike, my mom bought it for me when I was 10 to go to went to school every day.

✓ I used to have a bike; my mom bought it for me when I was 10 so I could go to school every day.

The sentence contains a past tense mistake and a redundancy: 'to go to went to school' mixes infinitive 'to go' with past 'went'. Replace with 'so I could go' to express purpose in the past. Also separate the two clauses with a semicolon or period to avoid a run-on sentence and ensure clear past-tense meaning.

× Yeah, I think at the moment in southern cities they are popular bit in majority at the moment people usually, usually electric bike or electric motorcycle.

✓ Yeah, I think that at the moment bicycles are popular in southern cities, but the majority of people usually use electric bikes or electric motorcycles.

This sentence has multiple structure and word-order problems: missing conjunction 'that', incorrect placement of 'at the moment' and 'in southern cities', use of 'bit' instead of 'but', and missing verbs for the second clause. Correct by adding 'that', placing time and location phrases properly, using 'but' for contrast, adding 'the' with 'majority', and supplying the verb 'use'. Also prefer 'bicycles' or 'bikes' consistent with earlier vocabulary and use plural agreement for 'electric bikes or electric motorcycles'.