Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và có cấu trúc: câu chủ đề nêu trực tiếp có/không, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (lý do hoặc ví dụ). Tránh lặp từ, phát âm sai từ quan trọng (ví dụ 'bike' bị phát âm là 'Pike') và dùng linking words đơn giản (because, so, therefore). Nên giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu và dùng thì phù hợp (past simple).

例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought I was too young to ride safely. Instead, they usually drove me to school and to the supermarket, so I rarely needed one.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và tránh mâu thuẫn trong câu (tránh nói 'I don't think... public transport is not'). Dùng linking words để giải thích lý do (because, so, therefore) và cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể ( ví dụ: car ownership, convenience, infrastructure). Hạn chế tiếng lắp và từ ngập ngừng (umm, uh).

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer private cars for convenience and comfort. As a result, cities are designed more for cars than for cyclists, so many people find driving easier than cycling.

× Well, when I was a child, I didn't have a Pike.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I didn't have a bike.

The word 'Pike' is a spelling error; it should be 'bike'. Correcting spelling is necessary for clarity. Suggestion: check spelling and use 'bike' for bicycle.

× I didn't have a bike because when I was child I came, I couldn't, I couldn't ride, ride a bike because I really, really lazy and I don't want.

✓ I didn't have a bike because when I was a child I couldn't ride a bike; I was really, really lazy and I didn't want to.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'child' and incorrect verb forms and tense consistency. 'I was a child' is correct. Use past tense 'couldn't' for ability and 'was' for state. 'I didn't want to' completes the negative intention in past. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events and include necessary articles.

× And I have a parents writing me to the school and writing me to the supermarket or.

✓ And my parents used to drive me to school and to the supermarket.

Pronoun and possessive error: 'a parents' is incorrect—use 'my parents'. Also 'have a parents writing me' is ungrammatical; use 'used to drive me' or 'drove me'. Suggestion: use correct possessive determiners and appropriate past tense verbs for habitual past actions.

× Umm, in my opinion, I don't think umm, umm, public transport is not, uh, popular in my country.

✓ Umm, in my opinion, I don't think public transport is very popular in my country.

Double negative: 'I don't think public transport is not popular' creates confusion. Use 'I don't think ... is very popular' or 'I think ... is not popular'. Suggestion: avoid double negatives and choose one negative structure.

× I think umm, private, uh, private transport is more popular than uh, bikes because they want to go to.

✓ I think private transport is more popular than bikes because people want to go further or faster.

The original sentence ends abruptly and uses 'they want to go to' without an object. Also repetition 'private, uh, private' and vague pronoun 'they'. Improve by specifying 'people' and a clear reason like 'further or faster'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, finish comparisons with a clear object or reason, and use appropriate nouns for subjects.