Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha düzgün bir konu cümlesiyle başlamalı ve dilbilgisi hataları düzeltilmelidir. Ayrıca destekleyici detaylar bağlaçlarla mantıklı şekilde eklenmelidir. Örneğin: geçmiş zaman kullanımında 'when I was a child' ifadesi doğru yerleştirilmeli, 'I loved it' gibi tamamlayıcı fiil çekimi kullanılmalı ve bir veya iki kısa destekleyici cümleyle anıyı veya neden sevdiğinizi açıklayın.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink and I loved riding it around the neighborhood. Because it was small and light, I could ride it easily and often went to the park with my friends.

提案: Bu soruya cevap vermek yerine sınav görevlisine soru sormak akışı bozuyor. Doğrudan görüşünüzü ifade edin, basit bir konu cümlesi kurun ve gerekirse kısa destekleyici nedenler veya örnekler verin. Akıcı konuşmak için dolgu kelimelerinden kaçının ve cümlenizi bağlaçlarla genişletin (for example, because, so).

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for short trips and exercise, especially in cities with bike lanes. For example, students and young professionals often commute by bike because it is cheap and convenient.

× As I had a bike when I was child and my bike was pink and I love it.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child; it was pink and I loved it.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. The student refers to a past situation ('when I was a child'), so all related verbs should be in the past tense: 'had' and 'was' are correct, but 'I love it' should be 'I loved it'. Also add the article 'a' before 'child' and improve sentence flow by using a semicolon or separate sentences. Suggestion: Keep verbs consistent in past narrative (use past tense verbs), include missing articles ('a child'), and split or connect clauses clearly.

× First of all, I want, I want to ask a question, uh, to last speech your speech, last your speech. Umm, what's the meaning? Cher is ****. Cherish it.

✓ First of all, I want to ask a question about your last speech. Umm, what does 'cherish' mean?

The original sentence has poor word order and repetition ('to last speech your speech, last your speech') and incorrect formation of an indirect question. Correct word order: 'ask a question about your last speech.' For asking the meaning of a word, use the phrase 'what does ... mean?' rather than 'what's the meaning? Cher is ****.' Also remove filler repetitions. Suggestion: Use clear word order 'ask a question about [topic]' and the question form 'What does X mean?' when asking for a word's meaning; avoid repeating phrases and fillers.