Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct answer to the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid repeating the examiner's question and unnecessary hesitation. Use linking words (e.g., "so", "because") to connect ideas and provide specific information (when, where, what kind of bike).

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was about seven, and I learned to ride it in the park near my house. Because I practiced every weekend, I became confident and often rode to school with my friends.

提案: Start with a clear, concise opinion, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Remove hesitations and unclear references (e.g., "since France"). Use linking words like "because", "for example", or "therefore" to make your answer coherent. Mention concrete facts (usage, infrastructure, environmental benefits) to strengthen your response.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many cities have bike lanes and public rental schemes. For example, in my city there are dozens of docking stations and many people cycle to work to avoid traffic. Therefore, cycling is seen as an affordable and eco-friendly option.

× Yes, since France knowing that everyone uses bikes so I I would say yes, bikes are too popular in our country and umm, it's the safest thing to use. Umm because cars can cause pollution.

✓ Yes. In France, everyone knows that people use bikes a lot, so I would say bikes are very popular in our country and they are a safe mode of transport because cars can cause pollution.

This sentence has multiple issues: run-on sentence, redundancy, and awkward phrasing. According to the provided list, this fits 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26) and also involves word choice and article/pronoun use. Problems include repeated words ('I I'), incorrect use of 'since' and 'knowing' together, and fragment 'Umm because cars...'. Correction breaks into clear sentences, replaces 'since France knowing that' with 'In France, everyone knows that', changes 'too popular' (awkward) to 'very popular', and replaces 'it's the safest thing to use' with 'they are a safe mode of transport'. Suggestion: keep sentences concise, avoid repetitions, ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb, and avoid starting sentences with conjunctions like 'because' without a main clause.