Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitation and grammatical errors (use past tense consistently). Use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., "but" or "and").

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. When I was about six or seven, I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood to visit friends and practice balancing. As a result, I became very confident riding on busy streets.

提案: Give a clear reasoned opinion and support it with specific examples. Avoid repetition and hesitations, and finish your sentences. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "also", "for example") and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "popular", "influencers", "convenient").

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many influencers promote cycling on social media. Also, bikes are an affordable and convenient way to get around cities, especially during rush hour. For example, students and office workers often cycle short distances instead of taking crowded buses.

× Uh, I don't have any bike in my childhood, but there was a bicycle, uh, when I was uh, like 6 or 7 year olds, I used to, uh. Cycling a lot in my childhood.

✓ I didn't have a bike in my childhood, but there was a bicycle when I was about six or seven years old; I used to cycle a lot.

Multiple errors: incorrect article usage ('any bike' should be 'a bike'); wrong tense for past habits ('don't have' should be 'didn't have'); incorrect plural/singular and age phrase ('7 year olds' should be 'seven years old'); awkward verb form and punctuation ('Cycling a lot' should be 'I used to cycle a lot'). Suggestions: use simple past for past facts, 'a' before singular countable nouns, write ages as 'X years old', and use 'used to' + base verb for past habitual actions.'},{