Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar (use 'a bike' vs 'an bike') and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and include concrete reasons or examples (when, where, or with whom you would ride).

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, now that I'm a teenager I plan to buy one because I enjoy outdoor exercise and it would help me travel to school more cheaply. For example, I hope to ride to the park on weekends with friends, so I'm looking for a sturdy commuter bike.

提案: Give a direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and one clear example. Improve fluency by using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'however') and more natural phrasing ('car-oriented', 'petrol-powered'). Avoid vague phrases like 'devices that have petrol in them.'

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because cities are car-oriented and public infrastructure favors motor vehicles. For example, most streets lack bike lanes, so people prefer petrol-powered cars and motorcycles for safety and convenience.

× I didn't have an bike when I was a child, but now I am a teenager and I am planning to buy a bike.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but now I am a teenager and I am planning to buy a bike.

Use 'a' before a noun that begins with a consonant sound. 'Bike' starts with a consonant sound, so the correct article is 'a', not 'an'.

× I didn't want a bike when I was a kid.

✓ I didn't want a bike when I was a kid.

This sentence is already correct in past tense; no change needed. The sentence correctly uses the past simple negative form 'didn't want'. (Provided to indicate it meets the grammar list and requires no correction.)

× I didn't really dream of riding a bicycle around the city or anywhere else.

✓ I didn't really dream of riding a bicycle around the city or anywhere else.

This sentence correctly uses the gerund 'riding' after the verb 'dream of'. No grammatical correction is required. (Included to match the requested checks.)

× But now when I am a teenager, I want to ride a cool bike.

✓ But now that I am a teenager, I want to ride a cool bike.

Use 'now that' to indicate a change of situation which is the reason for the present desire. 'When' is not wrong grammatically, but 'now that' is more natural in this context to link the current status to the desire.

× I don't think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country.

This sentence is correct; the preposition 'in' is correctly used with 'my country'. No correction required. (Included to confirm it meets the list.)

× I live in Cherokee which is a country mostly run by cars and mostly used transportation devices or devices that have petrol in them.

✓ I live in Cherokee, which is a country mostly run by cars and where most transportation uses petrol.

The original is wordy and awkward. Added a comma before the relative clause. Replaced 'mostly used transportation devices or devices that have petrol in them' with 'where most transportation uses petrol' for clarity and conciseness. This corrects adjective/adverb awkwardness and improves grammar and readability.

× So bike is not really a popular travel thing.

✓ So bikes are not really a popular means of travel.

Use plural 'bikes' to refer to the general category. Also 'a popular travel thing' is informal and ungrammatical; 'a popular means of travel' is a proper noun phrase. Subject-verb agreement requires plural noun 'bikes' with plural verb 'are'.