Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и улучшите связность ответа. Начните с прямого утверждения о наличии велосипеда, затем добавьте 2–3 конкретных деталей (кто купил, во сколько лет, чему научили, как вы себя чувствовали). Используйте правильные времена (Past Simple) и связки (because, when, so). Избегайте повторов и незавершённых предложений. Например, замените «have» на «had», уберите лишние фразы «how to read, how to write a bike» и завершите мысль.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandpa bought it for me when I was 12, and he taught me how to ride it. I felt very happy because it gave me freedom to explore my neighborhood and spend time outdoors.

提案: Устраните ошибки в лексике и согласовании (bikes, not banks), используйте чёткую топик-фразу, дайте причину и пример. Применяйте связки (because, however, for example) и правильные формы глаголов (use → uses/used, no one → few people). Уточните степень популярности и добавьте конкретный пример ситуации.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer cars because they are faster and more convenient, especially for long distances. However, some people still use bikes for short trips, for example to go to a nearby shop or to commute within a small town.

× Definitely I have a bag when I was when I was a child.

✓ I definitely had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence is confusing and contains tense and word-choice issues. Use past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child'. The word 'bag' is likely a typo for 'bike', and the duplicate phrase 'when I was' should be removed. Suggestion: keep simple past for past events and maintain clear word order (Subject + past verb + object).

× My grandpa bought me a bike when I was 12 years old and he taught me how to do and how to read, how to write a bike.

✓ My grandpa bought me a bike when I was 12 years old and he taught me how to ride it and how to look after it.

The phrase 'how to do' and 'how to read, how to write a bike' are incorrect collocations and make the sentence illogical. Use 'ride' for using a bike and 'look after' or 'maintain' for caring for it. Maintain past tense for both verbs since events occurred in the past. Keep verbs that collocate correctly with 'bike'.

× At that time I was very happy because I.

✓ At that time I was very happy because of it.

The clause is incomplete: 'because I.' lacks an object or explanation. Use 'because of it' to refer back to the bike, or complete the clause with a verb (for example, 'because I had a bike'). Ensure a full clause following 'because'.

× From my own perspective, I think in our country banks are not popular enough because in our country everyone has their own cars and no one use bikes for everyday use and sometimes they use for two nearby nearby places.

✓ From my perspective, bikes are not popular in our country because most people have their own cars, so no one uses bikes for everyday travel; sometimes people use them for short trips between nearby places.

Multiple issues: 'banks' is a typo for 'bikes'; repetition 'in our country' is redundant; subject-verb agreement 'no one use' should be 'no one uses'; 'everyday use' needs rephrasing to 'everyday travel'; 'two nearby nearby places' is redundant and incorrect. Use singular verb with 'no one', correct noun, remove repetition, and use 'short trips between nearby places'. Maintain present tense for general statements.