Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The student simply repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. Give a direct response (yes/no or short statement), then add 1–2 brief supporting details. Keep it natural and concise, use linking words if adding details. Avoid repeating the question.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bicycle that my parents bought me when I was six, and I rode it to the park every weekend.

提案: The answer is relevant but hesitates and has some disfluency (umm/uh) and minor grammar oddities. Improve by removing filler words, using a clear topic sentence, and adding one specific example or brief reason with a linking word. Keep it under five sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., commuting, errands).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and running errands. For example, in cities you often see commuters cycling to work and students riding to school, which reduces traffic and is inexpensive.

× Yes, of course uh bikes are very popular in my country because people can use uh this vehicle for the short trips and the daily basis uh Rd. trips.

✓ Yes, of course. Bikes are very popular in my country because people can use them for short trips and for daily commutes.

Problems: 1) Sentence run-on and disfluencies (uh, Rd.) make structure unclear; 2) 'this vehicle' is singular while referring to 'bikes' (plural) — pronoun mismatch; 3) 'the short trips' and 'the daily basis' use incorrect articles and noun forms; 4) 'daily commutes' is the correct collocation. Suggestions: remove filler words, split into two clear clauses, use plural pronoun 'them' to agree with 'bikes', use no article before 'short trips' and use 'daily commutes' instead of 'the daily basis'. Ensure tense remains present simple to match the general statement.