Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify meaning and use correct tense and pronouns. Begin with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary questions and incorrect grammar (e.g., "When are it back?").

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a simple, single-speed cycle that I used to ride to school and around the neighborhood. Also, I never owned a motorbike, so I only rode pedal bicycles until I was older.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer and use more precise vocabulary and linking words. Replace awkward word choices (e.g., "imminent") with accurate ones such as "common" or "widely used." Add a specific example or reason to support your statement.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars. For example, in rural areas and among students, low-cost motorcycles and bicycles are common choices for daily commuting due to their fuel efficiency and lower maintenance costs.

× When are it back? If you mean 2 Wheeler then I had a cycle but not the motor vehicle which consumes petrol.

✓ When was it back? If you mean a two-wheeler, I had a bicycle but not a motor vehicle that uses petrol.

The speaker used the wrong pronoun and verb form 'are it' which is ungrammatical; the correct past-tense question form is 'When was it back?' if asking about a time in the past. '2 Wheeler' should be written as 'a two-wheeler' and 'cycle' is better as 'bicycle' in this context. Also 'motor vehicle which consumes petrol' is wordy and slightly awkward; use 'a motor vehicle that uses petrol'. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb order for questions (When + auxiliary + subject + main verb) and choose appropriate nouns and relative pronoun 'that' for defining clauses.

× When are it back? If you mean 2 Wheeler then I had a cycle but not the motor vehicle which consumes petrol.

✓ When was it back? If you mean a two-wheeler, I had a bicycle but not a motor vehicle that uses petrol.

The original sentence omitted the article before '2 Wheeler' and used 'the motor vehicle' where 'a motor vehicle' is more appropriate because the speaker refers to any motor vehicle, not a specific one. Also 'a cycle' is acceptable but 'a bicycle' is clearer. Suggestion: include indefinite articles 'a' or 'an' when referring to one non-specific item.

× Bikes are the most imminent form of vehicle in my country because the four Wheelers are really expensive and not all people can afford it.

✓ Bikes are the most common form of vehicle in my country because four-wheelers are really expensive and not everyone can afford them.

The word 'imminent' is incorrect; it means 'about to happen'. 'Most common' fits the intended meaning. 'Four Wheelers' should be 'four-wheelers' (lowercase, hyphen) and is plural so pronouns must agree: use 'them' not 'it'. Also 'not all people' is better expressed as 'not everyone'. Suggestion: use appropriate adjective ('common'), correct plural form and pronoun agreement, and natural expressions like 'not everyone'.

× Bikes are the most imminent form of vehicle in my country because the four Wheelers are really expensive and not all people can afford it.

✓ Bikes are the most common form of vehicle in my country because four-wheelers are really expensive and not everyone can afford them.

'Imminent' is an incorrect adjective in this context; the intended meaning is frequency/popularity, so 'common' is appropriate. Also 'really expensive' is acceptable colloquially but 'very expensive' is slightly more formal. Suggestion: choose adjectives that match the intended meaning and maintain register consistency.

× Bikes are the most imminent form of vehicle in my country because the four Wheelers are really expensive and not all people can afford it.

✓ Bikes are the most common form of vehicle in my country because four-wheelers are really expensive and not everyone can afford them.

The singular pronoun 'it' was used to refer back to plural 'four-wheelers', causing a subject-pronoun agreement error. Also 'form of vehicle' is singular but refers to 'bikes' generally; the grammar is acceptable but clarity improves with 'form of vehicle' retained. Suggestion: ensure pronouns match the number of their antecedents (use 'them' for plural antecedents) and maintain consistent number agreement.